IELTS Live - Task 1 Writing - Band 9 Answers

hi students welcome to today's live ielts class my name is adrian i'm streaming to you from beautiful budapest here in hungary i hope all of you are having a great week hi natalie good to see your members in the class hi paya hi iman good to see our regular students as well uh students in this class we are looking at an ielts task one writing task two was the previous class and this lesson is presented to you by aehelp.com for academic ielts success check us out there for lots of examples with diagrams bar graphs other types of charts and hd videos if you're looking for general alex check us out at g ieltshelp.com that's general altshelp.com on both of those websites we have lots and lots of materials interactive courses quizzes full practice exams of course as well so definitely visit us there our general ielts website looks like this with the green background you can click that big red button to join and our academic one looks like this with the blue background click that big red button to join us there all right if you have questions just send me an email to adrian ae help dot com i will gladly answer any inquiries that you may have you can also download our apps academic ielts help from your google play apple app store you can link the app to your web account uh a help dot com and for general alex's general alts help app you can link it to your geilshelp.com account as well hi jai neil hi pavan nice to see more of our members live streams are usually at this time for members uh an hour and a half earlier today we're looking at task one with everybody tomorrow we will do a reading session with everyone with a brand new passage make sure to join us for that let's get into today's writing task this is i believe from a previous exam that was a while back uh here we go with the ielts task one writing question so you finish the listening you finish the reading you're feeling good you open up the writing section of your exam you're about two hours in and uh you see this question ielts task one writing you should spend about 20 minutes on this task you'll see that here you should spend about 20 minutes on the task the following charts show the use of water in three regions for three different applications report the main features and make comparisons where relevant write at least 150 words that means minimum 150 words ben 789 essays for task 1 will be closer to 200 words uh keep that in mind it's a minimum 150 words there's no maximum but of course you will run out of space and time on your paper so that's the limitation okay uh let's uh take a look at what we need to do what is our first step so uh students what do you do you have this task one diagram these pie charts uh what's your very first step okay so there's the pie charts i've got three of them what do we do you've read the question carefully making sure that you understand it beck john says paraphrase the question yeah you start your overview and it's a little bit more than just paraphrasing the questions so you write an overview okay the overview includes the introduction okay shiro jiren we've read the title we've read the question so what do we do natalie says you paraphrase the task assam says you look at the diagrams yeah it's a good idea to look at the diagram before you do anything so let's do that absolutely so here we have these beautiful pie charts you have san diego county you have california and then you have worldwide okay and this is water usage as it tells you here okay so the use of water in three regions right so water usage in these three places for three different applications we have residential okay means using water at home industry which means using water for manufacturing of products and then you have agriculture as the teal color here agriculture of course is farming okay so those are the three different reasons and then we have the slices and the percents here okay so we've looked at the diagram the pie charts in this case and then we write the overview the overview which is also the introduction okay that's not a separate part i'm still amazed how many people write a one sentence introduction for task 1 which is completely unnecessary to separate that so the overview has two parts okay keep it simple your goal is to get a high band score you want to write as simple as clear as possible while having a good essay okay so uh let's see uh sho dieva says paraphrase using three methods to do this um there's more than three methods to paraphrase there's at least five that i can think of but you're on the right track okay all right so there's two parts to that to the overview the first part is paraphrase the question with details from the graph okay that's your first part many students forget to add those details okay you want to add details you don't just simply paraphrase if you just paraphrase the question that doesn't really do as much as possible so you want to do more and then two is a report the main feature the most obvious observable part of the graph or the chart okay so that's what you need to do all right so here we have our question again the following charts show the use of water in three regions for three different applications report the main features so paraphrase this for me with more details i'm going to do the same and i see that we already have some paraphrases with details coming up let's see what you have uh samuel says the given three pie charts depict the percentage of water used for industrial agricultural as well as domestic purposes in san diego california and everywhere around the world very nice samuel that is a perfect start to this essay that's a band nine start to the essay nicely done samuel nigem on says three given pie charts depict the consumption of water in three specific areas and for three domains including residential industrial and agriculture good on that's good as well you can include the three regions right so nicely done so far lydia says the three pie charts depict the consumption of water in three specific areas san diego california and globally utilized for three particular purposes instead of operations lydia okay and you might as well name those as well so everybody looks like you're on the right track okay so these three pie charts depict the use of water as percentages in three areas san diego county california or we can say the state of california and globally for the purpose of home use industry and farming all right so that's my paraphrase there with more details and notice of course uh i'm paraphrasing as much of that information as possible so the examiner can see that i'm not just simply copying the text but i'm interpreting the information as well so instead of saying agriculture i used farming instead of domestic i said home use with this little hyphen here to connect that into one element and then of course recognizing that it's the state of california okay in san diego county here i'm just being much more specific so instead of saying the charts i'm saying these three pie charts so the examiner realizes that okay here's a student who knows what they're looking at okay so so far so good that is the beginning of our overview and you do not need to separate this from the introduction the overview is the introduction one more time just so that's absolutely clear okay um so i've done that now remember the second part of the overview is the most observable feature okay so what is the most observable feature here students and i'll definitely try to catch some different comments and different writing um what is the most observable so what do we notice right away this is where you have to be clever and you have to think outside the box or in this case hint outside the pie chart okay so what do we notice right away okay what do we notice first when we look at this what's what do we what's the most observable notion uh in this entire um presentation here okay hi eugen i'm doing fantastic thank you for cheering me up with those emojis uh samuel says at first glance it's clear that water is used the most for agriculture around the world except for the former two regions where it is used by residents i don't think that's the most observable feature samuel although we do have this big teal slice here and these different slices here um i don't think that's the most observable feature okay amit says overall it's quite evident from the chart that certain changes are inevitable with the progression of time i don't think i'm it that's what we're looking at here okay kali that's a good start okay um try to think uh about this in different ways so what are we actually looking at i'll move out of the way so you can see it but what are we actually looking at here um beck john says at first glance it's evident that each region uses water differently from the other okay so beck john's doing a little bit of a better job so becca says hey we look at each region we can see that there's quite a bit of variance for the purpose of water consumption that's okay all right um okay uh what are we comparing here okay i think um we can step back here um take a look at that what do you notice so what's very observable here if i'm looking at this as a human geographer for example so somebody dealing with human geography or industrial engineering for example i'll probably notice about that a little bit more so what are we actually comparing with these three pie charts before we get into water usage again for your audience it won't make much sense if you just start going right into these slices and percentages so ali says overall it's obvious that the use of water by residents was the highest in san diego um globally yeah very good so abhishek das has the best response yeah so far and there's abhishek different abhishek saying it's well it's city state worldwide yeah so we're going from a smaller region to a bigger region to an even bigger region right in fact you don't need to know this but of course it could be helpful san diego county is in california so san diego is a part of california and of course california is a part of the world so this pie chart is actually a part of this pie chart and this pie chart is actually a part of this pie chart okay so whoever is able to recognize that comparison and start with that in the overview you're going to be doing a lot better and you're going to be on track for a better band score okay so the most obvious feature here is the comparison of water use is among smaller to larger regions okay so that would be the most clever way to identify now if you don't know that san diego is in california that's okay but you should still hopefully realize that san diego is a city now san diego county is the larger area of san diego but california is a state okay so hopefully you realize that yes ielts does demand some knowledge of geography and certain concepts like that okay that's why i think they chose these names because i think most people are familiar with the state of california of course a lot of movies and everything comes from there okay so let's do um an overview that highlights this comparison okay so at first glance it is clear that the comparison is made from a smaller to larger region and eventually the entire world okay so that's what we're looking at here okay let's see if somebody uh has put something similar up there okay so prashanth says the pie chart diagrams elaborate on the percentages of water consumption between city state and the rest of the world okay prashant it's not two cities california is a state makta says at first glance it is evident that smaller to larger regions from san diego to california and worldwide are presented okay you have the right idea just a little bit tricky with the grammar lydia says san diego has the largest capacity of population consequently the industrial lydia san diego is a city okay the county of san diego is mostly a city all right all right uh muhammad azad says the usage of residential is more that's coming later mohammed okay so this is your uh overview here so these three pie charts depict the use of water as present percentages in three areas san diego county the state of california and globally for the purpose of home use industry and farming at first glance it is clear that the comparison is made from a smaller to larger region and eventually the entire world okay that would be your band nine start all right and now uh we get into the analysis okay so when we do the analysis here now we realize that it makes sense to analyze this pie chart first emphasize this large use of residential application okay and then the smaller equatable uh farming and uh industry and then as we go to the state of california right then we get into our second group of comparisons i should probably say a here makes a little bit more sense and then we'll go b here and we'll go 3 and then 4 okay something like that these are fairly even of course residential is still more and then we go to c which is worldwide and we get into five six and seven okay so that would be your logical order of comparison it's really important to have this knowledge here okay all right okay so uh let's do this let's um first describe what we see in a here in san diego county so residential use makes up 60 and the remaining 40 percent is split between industry and agriculture okay so let's write that first go ahead write that uh first sentence so let's see how you introduce your analysis this is your body paragraph okay so your body paragraph is made up of these points make sure to clearly identify your points of comparison before you start to write okay maina kun is asking can we compare groups of residential industrial and agriculture instead of states you can just make sure that makes sense we're going to do that anyway okay hassam says despite the large amount of water usage for home purposes in the city where did that go it looked like a good start see if i can catch it okay seem to have disappeared it's okay all right beck john says at first glance it becomes clear that the comparison is between city state and eventually worldwide yeah that works bec john okay uh smaller to larger settlements is a good way to say it as well so at first glance it's clear that the comparison is made from smaller to larger settlement okay all right there's hassam so despite the large amount of water usage for home purposes in the city of san diego the whole amount is profile profoundly tiny uh when compared to water consumption in the world yeah hassam i think it's okay it's a little bit unclear as long as you clarify that in your next sentence is what you mean by that negaimon says with deeper analysis it is obvious that san diego residents made up two-fifths of the water consumption uh in the county yeah nickhame that's a good start so i would start like this so um so this is the analysis or analyses for plural so when looking at the consumption of water in the urban area of san diego county clearly the majority is used for residential purposes three fifths to be exact okay so again um your goal is to interpret the data to get those really high band scores band seven eight or nine you need to interpret the data so notice how here sixty percent of the pie is for residential use now sixty percent i don't wanna just repeat sixty percent but i can paraphrase that as well so 16 is three-fifths right so if this is 10 then this is 6 of 10 i can divide both of those by 2 so it's three-fifths okay three-fifths of the whole all right and then this is of course a four of ten so i can again divide each of those by two and it's two-fifths okay so i can finish that by saying the remaining two-fifths of water used in the county is split between industry and farming with industry slightly more okay that's all i need to do all right so here we have farming or agriculture and we have industry and this remaining slice here it's fairly evenly split with slightly more being used by industry six percent okay all right let's see what some of you wrote so far so while i'm talking um absolutely i challenge you to write in your own way okay there's more than one way to skin the cat as they say there are many many ways to paraphrase or interpret the information i'm showing you one way that can get you that high band score but of course i challenge you to write in your own words and i will gladly look at that in the chat okay all right abhishek says looking uh at this in more detail san diego county has the biggest slice of domestic water usage at 60 while 17 and 23 percent are for farming and industry re respectively yeah that's okay abhishek i mean um in some sense you're really just describing the data instead of interpreting it and again remember students that describing the data is okay you can get band six seven maybe even seven five with descriptive data but to get into the band eight eight point nine you need to have interpretation okay interpretation is one step further from description it's looking more deeply at the information okay so take that extra step all right okay nalesh says the analysis of water consumption differs in percentage residential having the highest rate at sixty percent okay uh again that's okay nalesh um still you're more just into description little bit of interpretation with highest rate but again that's quite clear okay all right so again students you don't want to have a task one essay that's simply full of numbers and percentages all right the higher band score essays don't have that it's okay if you use a couple numbers but you don't want to have 150 words or 200 words where 30 or 40 words are just numbers with percent signs okay so that's quite important all right okay so now we can go to the second pie chart which i labeled for analysis b and then take a look at how that changes so now we're looking at it the larger area that san diego is a part of which is the state of california and of course here we realize that residential is still quite high but it's much more balanced with um with industry and agriculture okay so we want to report that and while we're reporting that we want to make the comparison with san diego so we want to express this comparison here from san diego to the larger area so try that one okay try that okay so i'm gonna do the same i'll write that sentence and then let's see how you come up with it okay okay so that's my next sentence here let's see what you come up with okay so sana says the amount of water which is used in residential area of san diego is three-fifths of all and the two other categories namely industry and agriculture agriculture are 23 and 11 respectively okay sana's that's nice so you're reflecting that previous sentence amit aldo says as a state california accommodates more preference to residents and less for industry and farming when looking behind the pie chart of the earlier as it's depicted the same okay i mean i think you're on the right tractor i like how you are interpreting the data rather than simply just naming the percentages so you're on the right track that's what you want to do okay vishal r says however as a whole the state of california the residential sector remains the highest but the proportion of water used in agriculture and industry has increased significantly not just slightly vishal quite a bit in fact okay uh vishal you're definitely on the right track again so you're showing interpretation which is great you're gonna get a better band score with that okay all right let's see some other ones so uh mahou sano says unlike the water used in san diego the three purposes of water usage in california state are almost balanced out with residential purpose slightly outweighing the other two very nice mahou that's a nice uh description and interpretation there much much better okay so this is what i wrote here uh when looking at the larger area the state of california which san diego county is a part of if you know that if you don't it's fine the proportion of water used for industry domestic and agriculture becomes much more balanced whereby each is approximately a third of the whole okay now if i want to go into a little bit more explanation i can i just need to make sure i have time to do this if i don't i would just go on to water used worldwide okay but i can go in and explain this if i feel okay i'm writing fast i've only taken about 10 minutes to get to this point i can go into explaining that residential is still slightly more than industry which is a few percent greater than uh agriculture or farming okay so home consumption of water in california is still slightly more than industry which is a few percent more than agriculture okay and that's why it's important to include the word approximately all right so that's interpretation all right we're rocking and rolling i think um that everybody is getting the right idea now so let me give you a head start on worldwide okay so i've done it for san diego and california obviously california is on planet earth so that needs no explanation um so make the comparison of california to worldwide and report what's going on here okay so i'll take a look at some of the other responses in the meantime but right now your goal is to report how the usage of water for these three purposes changes when we're looking at the entire planet of human population okay all right lydia says in california we can observe that there is not a great difference in the three sectors nevertheless the usage of water is still slightly higher for residential okay good all right lydia that's good then it decreases slightly with industry at about 33 and agriculture has the least at 28 yeah and we want to be really careful lydia with these highest and least because the differences are so small that we don't want to emphasize that slight difference okay all right hassan sadiq says um turning to worldwide uh usage of water agriculture makes up 69 of the total and both industry and domestic combined make up just 31 okay very good hassan now continue that with another sentence to compare it to the state and the county level usage of water so i'd like to see your next sentence there hassan which makes the comparison of the global to the state and the county okay samuel says zooming out nice i like that samuel so zooming out yeah like we're using google earth uh zooming out from the state of california the water is used similarly by residents and industries as well as agriculture um with order following that of its own county of san diego okay good samuel so that was your second pie chart or b okay amit aldo says considering the worldwide interpretation we can see that agriculture uh is the largest percent than industry and only eight percent is residential okay good amit that's good start continue by comparing that to the other two okay even if it's just one simple sentence i mean this is quite a contrast to the county of san diego or even the state of california right okay abhishek says on the planet as human populations increase day by day so definitely do we need to have a large amount of food so agriculture shares a huge number of water consumption abhishek das we don't know that okay you're bringing your own knowledge into that sentence you must not do that students in task one do not bring your own knowledge and your own opinion into the um response it's very important that you don't confuse interpretation with opinion okay so i'm just going to take a moment here to kind of uh summarize what i mean by how to get high band scores okay so in order to get high band scores on academic task one what's called an expository essay you must interpret the data and not just simply report it also you must not give your own opinion or knowledge okay interpretation is not opinion okay opinion is for task two that's your persuasive essay that's your task two essay in your writing section that's where you're asked for your opinion but not in task one in task one very clearly the question always says report the main features and make comparisons were relevant this here when you read the report the main features and make comparisons were relevant another way you could think about this but they don't write this because it could be a little bit confusing for some students is use the given data to interpret and summarize the information okay that would be a little bit more confusing so they choose to word it in this way okay but really what they're saying is use the given data to interpret and summarize the information okay it does not say give your own opinion right so careful with that okay um so while some of you are still writing i'm gonna write up um the end here for me on the global scale the consumption of water is a significant contrast to the county of san diego and california worldwide nearly 70 percent of all water is used for farming as where only eight percent is domestic the remainder is industry okay so that's it all right so that's it that's all that analysis is okay so once more let's take a look at the charts here so we have three pie charts we have a smaller region a much larger region california is quite a big state in fact it's much larger than many many countries okay and then we have an even larger scale which is worldwide so those of you looking at this with a critical eye should recognize that we're making comparisons at three different scales here for water use okay and then when we do that we realize that there's quite a bit of variance when looking at the urban scale of course a lot of its residential when we're looking at the global scale a lot of it is for agriculture so with good analysis and interpretation your essay reads like this with the overview so i'm going to read the overview the analysis and then we're going to add one more part that many people don't really understand whether it's needed not needed why it's needed so i'm going to show you that so don't go anywhere okay here we go so overview these three pie charts depict the use of water as percentages in three areas san diego county the state of california and globally for the purpose of home use industry and farming at first glance it is clear that the comparison is made from a smaller to larger region and eventually the entire world when looking at the consumption of water in the urban area of san diego county clearly the majority is used for residential purposes three-fifths to be exact the remaining two-fifths of water used in the county is split between industry and farming with industry slightly more when looking at the larger area the state of california which san diego county is a part of the proportion of water used for industry domestic and agriculture becomes much more balanced whereby each is approximately a third of the whole home consumption of water in california is still slightly more than industry which is a few percent more than agriculture on the global scale the consumption of water is a significant contrast to the county of san diego and california worldwide nearly 70 percent of all water is used for farming as we're only eight percent is domestic the remainder is industry okay and now we summarize okay so you should write a summary a summary is a an interesting piece of information that we can understand from the graphs which is not a repetition of the overview or analysis now think simple okay so don't over complicate this part i think some students when they realize oh yeah summary is good to include think simple this is usually just one sentence okay so to sum up i'll show you how simple this is to sum up the use of water [Music] around the world varies extensively depending on the scale of observation scale and location okay so that's what i can summarize from this all right that's the most simple summary is when i look at this what i really learn is that if somebody asks what is the use or the proportional use of residential industrial and agricultural water then i would say well it depends on the scale and where you're looking at that's where that's what we're able to interpret after deeper analysis of all of this information that's presented to us okay so you don't have to go further than that there's many there are many different ways to state that you can say that in a simpler way you can say it in two sentences but simply that's it to sum up the use of water around the world varies extensively depending on the scale and location of observation or analysis okay or statistics again lots of different ways uh to do it all right okay um lots of good writing uh students um it's not short so amina kuhn says i think it's kind of short i'll tell you exactly how many words this is manikun uh it's definitely over the 150 word limit um i'm going to try to take out any or i'll try to estimate the extra words that i have here but i'll tell you how many words this is okay so this is 246 words now i have a little bit of extra here right so the word analysis obviously will minus one and then all of this instruction here which is one two three four five six seven eight nine 10 11 12 roughly 20 words there so this essay as is is approximately 210 words okay now again remember students 150 is the minimum so your band 7 8 9 especially essays will be much closer to that 200 okay uh hassam's asking i don't think we can say in conclusion yeah that's right hassam you cannot say in conclusion this is not a conclusion okay students you have to learn that a summary and a conclusion are not the same they're similar but there are very important differences especially at the university or college level okay a conclusion draws an opinion based on the presented argument or ideas that's a conclusion a summary condenses and highlights or we can also say interprets the presented facts in the longer information okay so summary and conclusion are not the same idea a conclusion is for task two a summary is for task one okay you should not confuse these okay and this is of course very important for you academic students okay uh hisham you can find speaking partners on our website there's a student partner speaking function on the websites where people are always waiting to connect okay all right lydia says there for sir we must not include facts in bar charts as you said i'm not sure what you mean by that lydia if you mean uh opinions then definitely not nema you cannot get a 10 in ielts because the maximum score is abandoned nine okay all right um okay everyone so that is the essay i will post this essay with the question and the graph on our youtube channel on our community uh posts okay so check that out and if you like this lesson and you want to see some hd videos without interruption in high quality uh there's over a hundred hours of video lessons at ae help dot com in our premium package and of course we have lessons for task one letter writing for general outs at glthelp.com that's it for today tomorrow i'll be back with an original reading passage for everyone and of course members will finish that task 2 essay that we started earlier today i hope everybody had a fun class as much fun as ielts can be and i wish you all a great rest of your day if it's late in your country sweet dreams take care of your health stay strong eat your vitamins much love to all of you from budapest i'm adrienne bye for now you

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Published: Thu Jul 16 2020