IELTS Live - Task 1 Writing a Band 9 Line Graph

and welcome to today's live isles class my name is adrian and i'm streaming to you live from beautiful victoria on the west coast of canada i hope everybody is having a great week so far in this class we are looking at a task 1 line graph and we are going to write a band 9 response to the question this is a members chat class of course everybody is welcome to watch to become a member click the join button next to the subscribe button welcome jai neil welcome members this lesson is presented to you by ae help dot com for academic ielts success please visit us there for the general aisles check us out at g ielts help dot com that's generalist help dot com on both of those websites we have loads of materials videos practice exams strategies that are unique and that will help you to improve your band scores and your communication for work immigration and of course for university studies as well welcome rashika hi devange good to see you in the class i'll quickly show the websites while we 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morning to you it's just the start of the evening for me here natalie so all right um and we will have a task two class coming up some more writing after this class so hang around for an interesting task to question all right let's take a look at task one uh today so uh you get to your writing section and you open up your booklet if you're doing the paper-based exam on the computer-based exam it'll pop up on the screen and then you can start with either task i'd definitely recommend starting with task one task one lets you warm up a bit all of the information for your essay is there you just have to use the right english and the right structure and content to get that high band score so first step always is to read the question carefully okay don't rush a very common mistake after the reading section is candidates read at the same speed as they're reading during the reading section which is sometimes a bit faster and they don't pay enough attention to these questions so read these questions a little bit slower really pay attention to the information here we go so read it with me the graph below shows the average number of commuters in tokyo using various means of transportation summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant right at least 150 words they do count the words in the computer-based exam it's really easy for them because uh the software gives them the word count and you can also see it that's one of the advantages of the computer-based exam is you can actually see your word count so for band 9 essays what you want to focus on is to have i would say anywhere from 220 to 250 words for task one it's very difficult to get a band 9 with just 150 60 words because usually there's more information contained in these graphs that can be well described in that 150 words so thanks for the good evening natalie i appreciate it it's just past 6 30 here all right um okay so uh we read the question carefully now uh task one definitely only spend 20 minutes on it and uh do take a look at the graph before you write anything okay so you want to observe the graph um let me see if i can maybe make this a little bit bigger because i can see that it's a bit foggy it's a bit difficult to see and try to make it fairly clear but anyway it's a fairly simple graph so i can even highlight the points as we do this basically you have three lines here the blue line indicates cars the green line indicates bus and the orange line indicates train and it's the number of commuters in millions on the y-axis this is called the y-axis here in english and you have zero three million six million nine million okay uh just a quick question members uh how can you describe that y-axis so zero at the bottom three million six nine what do you call these kind of jumps and the number of passengers anybody remember that vocabulary that's really useful when you're describing that number that quantification for your audience how do you call that so 0 3 6 9 would be described as this is just a quick kind of pop quiz question for you so how would you describe these these spacings here while you think about that i'll show you the x-axis so the x-axis let me get it even a bit bigger there we go um yeah we really don't need to see any of that okay here we go so the x-axis has the years um and it's 1970 1980 1990 2000 2010 2020 and 2030. yeah very good rashika they're called intervals yeah so when you have equal numbers between each point in the data those are intervals yeah so with intervals of three million commuters very good uh gineal all right so at the bottom here um we have the dates and it starts uh 1970 and then in the middle here we have 2000 and then we have 2030 so right away you're recognizing some important points that basically we have 60 years of data here okay 30 years before the new millennium and 30 years after the new millennium what's important to notice as you're looking at these years so 1970 2000 to 2030 what do you have to recognize right away uh before you start to get deeper into this writing tell me that there's something important there as well that you should be noticing or recognizing at this point also okay all right um so the essay for this it's called an expository essay which seeks to explain the information okay you're not just reporting it's not simply a descriptive essay you're not just describing the graph but you're actually interpreting so you're analyzing and interpreting the graph members keep that question in mind i'm still curious that x-axis what do you have to recognize in that x-axis there's something yeah very good gineal yeah future time as well right we're in 2021 right now so there's a predicted data point in the future yeah that's very very good okay rashik is saying there's intervals of 10 years or a decade that's important but janil that's what i was thinking is that it's important to realize that we are also predicting the future so this is past present and future really pay attention to that if you get this kind of a question for your ielts okay uh so uh members um what's my first step so what do i have to do i've read the question carefully and now what do i do okay so obviously i'm going to start writing my essay here and the first step and i've changed this just recently a little bit to coincide that means to be more agreeable with the ielts format it's not quite what you would do in university but for ielts it's what you need to do yeah call deep very good you got that so it's prediction as well here yeah so um ielts task one for the of course for anybody looking for general ielts examples go to glshelp.com please and check it out there for this you're going to start with the introduction okay introduction is simply um yeah a paraphrase of the question with more details so paraphrase the question with more details using the information in the axes and the legend in this case okay so what we looked at there on the legend and then the axes okay all right um so let's do that okay so one more time just real quick you can start your paraphrasing with details members and then i'll give you some feedback um so the graph below shows the average number of commuters in tokyo using various means of transportation summarize the main features and make comparisons were relevant it's quite a vague question there's definitely a lot more information here for the introduction so you want to use this information here again blue cars green bus and orange is train okay i know it's a little bit harder to read but it's a fairly simple graph so you can kind of keep it in mind and then it's 1970 to 2030 with intervals of a decade 10 years and then here on the y-axis it's number of commuters and millions and its intervals of three million okay so write the introduction i'm going to do the same and i'll be silent while i do this so you can hear yourself think and then we'll compare okay all right uh devonch the legend when you're talking about a graph or a map the legend is always the description of the data that you see so this is called the legend when you're looking at a map davange when it explains what the little triangle is or what the little square of the box um then that's the legend on the map so it's basically a definition of the symbols that's being used in the picture like the graph that's your legend okay now think about it kind of like an index navange it's another way to call it legend or an index okay all right uh awesome so i've got my introductory paragraph ready let's see where everybody is don't think don't overthink it so i know you're practicing in these live classes but do also work on your fluency remember you really just have 20 minutes for this task from the beginning to the end and you must save 40 minutes for task 2. not only that but you also want to keep a couple of minutes throughout your writing so that you can review each paragraph as you finish for mistakes for content for spelling for grammar okay so you definitely want to work on building your writing fluency or typing fluency okay if you're doing the computer-based exam improve your touch typing as well okay all right so while i wait for some of your responses i'm sure they're coming shortly this is what i wrote here this line graph so instead of just saying graph i name it it's a line graph so this line graph compares the number of commuters i use the same word here it's a little bit tricky to paraphrase the word commuters and it really does make sense to use that here so the line graph compares the number of commuters from 0 nine million with intervals of three million among three modes of transport cars trains and buses between the years 1970 and 2030 with intervals of a decade okay so i'm reviewing that a little bit closer i'm going to try to see if i can make some fixes here if i'm going to use numbers i'm going to stick to numbers uh it's okay to just use numbers in this task one in task two you should write the words from zero to ten okay and i'm going to stick another comma in here i feel that's missing because it's followed by different information sorry here and instead of three modes of transport i think the word transportation is a bit more accurate here okay and um i'm making a very long sentence here so i want to put a half stop and just read better now this of course is using advanced punctuation you don't have to worry about it too much but it's more important here that you're paying attention to the fact that i'm reviewing and revising so i'm taking a few moments to read my writing and make it read even better so this line graph compares the number of commuters from 0 to 9 million with intervals of 3 million among 3 modes of transportation cars trains and buses between the years 1970 and 2030 with intervals of a decade okay so it's a very long sentence if you can't do it in one sentence don't worry about it break it into two sentences okay just make sure that they are accurate okay call deep says the line graph illustrates the average um number of people using different types of transportation on the x-axis it reveals the time period from 1970 to 2030 and on the y-axis it shows the number of commuters from 0 to 9 million with intervals of 3 million that's where you ran out of space called deep that's good okay um yeah and koldip see you reminded me of another mistake that i've made and it is an important um word um which is average now there is another way to say the word average especially in graphs and charts and statistics anybody know what that is called deep do you know what another word is for average there's a perfect synonym if you will and it's especially used in statistics and graphs when we're discussing them it's actually a shorter word it's somewhat simpler to express if you know it anybody know what that word is welcome saga good to have you on board you're just on time and it'll make sense still we're at the beginning what is that word that means average it starts with the letter m yeah very good gineal mean that's right yeah another meaning of the word mean it doesn't mean uh that they're nasty numbers it just means the average numbers so this line graph compares the mean number of commuters from zero to nine million with intervals of three million among three modes of transportation cars trains and buses between the years 1970 and 2030 with intervals of a decade now koldeep you'll notice that i'm not using um x-axis and y-axis here um some people believe that it's not good to do that it doesn't matter it does show your lexical resource your vocabulary and your writing section does assess your vocabulary range so it's okay to refer to the x and y axis there's no rule against that okay it's kind of like you're doing a presentation all right okay good so we've got that and now i'm gonna take my introduction i'm just gonna grab that i'm gonna stick it underneath the graph here so that we can continue okay what's my next step um here students so um what should i do now so i've got my introduction great now i need to go on to my next step what do i do while you're thinking about that i'm going to read devonshi's introduction the given line graph represents the number the average number of people using a particular type of transportation comma including sorry including comma cars trains and buses not like devange the word like means similar to but in this case it's not similar to cars trains and buses it is cars trains and buses okay so instead of like um including comma cars trains and buses um in the period of 1970 to 2030 um with intervals of three million commuters okay make sure you have a comma after 2030 davonch and you don't need the word year there in 1970 to 2030 that's clear for the reader okay rashika says the line graph illustrates the average number of passengers in tokyo utilizing different types of vehicles cars buses and trains watch your plurals rashika so cars comma buses we can't count buses so buses comma and trains for commute the x-axis indicates the year uh the years from 1970 to 2030 with 10 year intervals it's not 10 years intervals it's just 10 year intervals with the hyphen rashika so 10 hyphen year intervals while the x y axis depicts the usage of vehicles with three million intervals okay all right janiel says the line graph depicts the mean number of commuters in millions from zero to nine with intervals of three million uh in tokyo using three mediums of transportation cars buses and rail okay not rail or rails i'd have to check that i think we don't count it like that in that case in that context daniel i think it would just be rail instead of rails okay it would be non-count gineal that form of the word trains it's kind of an exception it's weird i know but it's because rails is has a different meaning as well so it's a tricky one all right koldip says analysis janil says main features uh called janil i agree it's a bit of both right so we have to do some analysis to identify the main feature and that's our next step is to identify the main feature by analyzing the graph a little bit more not in a lot of detail but just getting kind of a general idea of this and in this case it's actually good that you don't really see the numbers or the legend because you shouldn't you shouldn't be looking for the main feature at the data points too much you should just really be looking at the overall um picture here okay so um what can we say about this what is the most noticeable main feature when we stare at these okay and again uh i always encourage everyone to look past the most and the least okay so don't just think about most and least but try to have a little bit deeper insight into what's happening with the trends or the changes that this line graph is showing okay line graphs show change over time so you should be thinking about present perfect like have been and ing progressive forms okay rashika says the given course the dominant type of vehicle is cars okay so throughout all of these years the dominant form of transportation is cars i agree with that okay um there's something that i kind of i notice a little bit more okay for me there's there's something that pops out a little bit more than just the dominance of cars okay anybody see what i'm looking at it's almost kind of surprising this main feature uh what do you see so what is it that you see here so danielle says carson train transportation increases and the use of buses decreases throughout the period yeah um i agree yeah that's what's noticeable in fact you can almost see that the use of trains trains is the orange line of course and uh cars uh the the blue you almost see parallel lines so you notice how these two they're virtually parallel they're very very close to being parallel lines of course cars dominate so you have almost twice the number of commuters using cars at any given period but most what's most interesting is that they're virtually parallel lines as where here with buses you definitely have a decrease in um usage okay of people who ride the bus so that i think is very very obvious so very good that's what i noticed as well neil okay good you're you're getting a really good eye for it now janelle you're you're starting to think like me i hope that's a good thing all right um good so let's take that as a main feature okay let's take that as a main feature all right so i'm going to write this main feature and uh you write it and then we'll compare and see how you expressed yourself and how i expressed myself here we go so this is what in the ielts they call the overview in university when you're doing something like this the overview would include the introduction but not on the outs and the outs they'll separate this out maybe it's easier for them to mark or something i don't know about that but anyway um so okay and um i can't remember who it was uh rashika rashika is saying that um cars dominate um during the period you might add that in in the in this part as well sure okay why not we can add a little bit more there um okay is that a question janil the while and conversely um so here gineal before i get ahead of myself i'm going to proofread i might have made a mistake we'll check it out conversely means in the opposite and it's a very nice word for that it's actually much nicer than on the other hand conversely is more technical okay i'm going to read it in a second janil and see what's going on uh called deep says at first glance it becomes clear that trains uh will be the most prominent means of transportation in the future uh not quite called deep i think cars okay so um let me just um clarify this one more time i know the legend is kind of tiny and difficult to read so blue line is uh cars uh green line is uh buses the second one and the third one that's trains okay all right and if we were to average the green and the orange line it would be roughly the same blue is obviously much much more okay all right so i'll read my uh main feature or main features at the same time i will review it for mistakes for content for accuracy for coherence and then i'll wait for you to do the same so immediately it is clear that the usage of cars and trains follow a nearly parallel and increasing pattern over the course of the given 60 years while buses conversely decrease uh over these six decades as well trains and buses are used by an average similar number of passengers in this period or in the given period that's missing information in the given period means in the six years while cars are used significantly more okay now i've got another use of while okay while in this context is like conversely so instead of using while here i'm going to use however because i've used while twice yeah um so i see what you're asking here jenille so why am i writing given 60 years while buses conversely decrease this is an interesting type of writing technique here janil notice the very important use of this comma and comma here uh it's an emphasis um i caution you though use this very very carefully uh gineal so what i'm doing here is i'm emphasizing the contrast and you can do that in different ways you can use it with but and on the other hand as well but comma on the other hand comma so it's a way to emphasize the contrast however be really really careful there are only a few pairings that you can do that with naturally okay that was a really good question janil so a few types of pairings you can do this uh emphasis with the contrast okay so while buses comma conversely comma okay it i know that seems awkward but it is a technique to emphasize contrast um but comma busses on the other hand decrease that's another way that you could do it very good question janil okay uh rashika says at first glance it is clear that the popularity of cars and trains um are increasing in a parallel fashion throughout the course of this period while the preference for using buses decreases over the given 60 years rashika not bad i made some i made a few important corrections there make sure you go back and review the video of my corrections compared to what you wrote okay devon says after close analysis it is observable that cars and trains follow a similar pattern of increasing order while cars are used by most travelers subsequently followed by trains that second part davange that's where you fall apart a little bit so your first piece of information increasing order is okay and then that second piece i would write a new sentence okay you can see that i did that as well i started a new sentence uh careful davange not to try to put too much information into one sentence with commas doesn't work well okay when you use commas it has to be similar or like information in that phrase all right so when you're talking about new information like cars are used by many more travelers than the other two types of transportation then you should start a new sentence right uh khaldeep is asking can we write immediately comma it is clear that um yeah you can because it's the main feature so the main feature is immediately clear called if i would actually write that more in the overview than i would write it in the analysis okay it's a good question all right and as call deep is hinting we are now going into the analysis phase so this is where we actually make our comparisons all right and uh here we have to take a minute to indicate some data points this is where your note paper you have a piece of paper in the computer-based exam in your pen this is where it's very useful to quickly like for this graph in the computer-based exam if i were to get something like this i would actually redraw this graph just super quick in a rough kind of way so that i could indicate the data points uh on my piece of paper rather than trying to keep it all in my head while looking at the graph okay so if it's a simple graph like this it could be a really good idea in your computer-based exam to just quickly redraw the graph rough and about with these lines and then indicate the main points of comparison all right so let me ask you members what would be um the first point here so what should we tackle first what do we want to um discuss first in this graph you can do it a few different ways you could go by transportation type or you could go by years as well okay up to you i think both can make sense right um i'm curious what you feel so tell me what do you think now because we have time so 1970 to 2030 it does make sense to be chronological chronological means to go in a time sequence or in a time order so definitely start from 1970 whether you're comparing all three or each individual line okay all right saga says the jump in cars from 1980 to 2000 okay 1980 uh to 2000 um i think there's an even bigger jump maybe coming after so i don't know if i would describe that especially since we talked about the paralleling of trains and cars i might not start with that one saga says trains overtaking the use of buses around uh 2010 or shortly thereafter um yeah that's going to be something we want to mention but definitely not the first point okay so janelle says let's do time sequence so let's start with 1970. i agree with three lines like this where we have two parallel lines i would probably start with a time sequence so this data point here would be my number one in 1970 okay and then what would be your second data point okay so what would be your second data point rashika i think you're on the right track no pun intended with trains of course so gradually increasing yeah especially for cars and trains so my next data point here would be around 2000 right and this would be my data point two okay and then here for buses we could kind of make that data point to b comparing it to these data points here okay that would be my next one all right so definitely those 20 years into the future all right um and then my next data point could be this intersection of uh of um trains uh surpassing buses okay and then i would talk about the continuous growth in the use of cars and then i would summarize with the future prediction of uh cars buses okay so that's kind of how i would go that makes sense and hopefully we recognize that does that is that clear uh members does it make sense so i would start here then there's nothing too too much going on here i wouldn't start reporting too much there i would just go all the way 20 years into the future and then um this uh intersection here maybe a little bit about the continuous growth in the use of cars and then the future prediction uh in the next uh 10 years into the future okay daniel says that makes that seems to make sense okay all right so let's start with this um so uh everybody start writing an analysis for 1970. uh this is 50 years ago okay keep that in mind 50 years ago and here we have uh trains around 2 million we have buses around 4 and then cars at around five okay all right so i'm going to write you right and we'll continue from there all right okay so let's do this you have the information all right so that's how i would do it let me get that a little bit further over maximum size there we go all right maybe i'll shrink it a little bit here we go okay so at the beginning of the period in 1970 an average of 2 million commuters use trains and i'm reviewing again i have to keep reminding myself because i have a habit of not using numbers but in task when it's okay in most writing you do have to write if you're not writing about math or statistics or graphs you should be using numbers 0 to 10 okay and of course i'm really paying attention to my verbs now you ride buses and you ride trains i didn't want to repeat that so use trains rode buses and drove cars be really careful about that okay saga says in early 1970 there was a big difference of usage between all types of transportation i don't think so saga the difference actually increases later on they're more they're closer um during the 1970s and uh careful not to state in early 1970 we just have the year 1970 we're not that granular so we don't have months okay all right i'm going to move along and uh type as i go here just because i want to get to the bottom of this essay so follow with me and try to work on your fluency as well here students so you can jump in at any point if you're still at one that's fine if you can get to two that's okay as well all right um so here uh we are going into the year 2000 so heading into the new millennium okay and cars are 7 million all right so that's my next data point there okay devonch says in 1970 the mode of transportation um was uh the majority okay let's try that one more time tomorrow so in 1970 the majority of transportation uh was cars followed by buses and trains okay careful with that correction there the bunch uh saga says since 2000 the statistics of cars and trains becomes very stable and similar however usage of cars is approximately two times more than that of trains that's a good observation saga i like it you don't need capitals for cars and trains okay all right rashika says at the beginning of the year people's popularity for using cars was 5 million buses 4 million and trains 2 million period capital t this preference uh peaked at the millennium um i don't think it peaked rashika at the millennium it's it's expected to peak in the future it's still going up okay so careful with content mistakes all right okay janilla looking good i'm going to keep typing again so we can get to the bottom of this all right so now i'm going so i've gotten one and two two b out of the way and now i'm going to three okay so uh soon after 2010. okay so here we go um heading into the new millennium the usage of buses gradually decreased while the use of trains increase okay i don't like that present tense there i'm going to change that again i'm reviewing for mistakes i'm going to change that to present perfect because line graphs are great for present perfect why because present perfect of course shows change over time and this is where we really want to emphasize that change over time let me shrink this a little bit so you're getting more of it on the screen okay all right so one more time heading into the new millennium the use of buses gradually decreased while the usage of trains have increased both nearing an average of 3 million passengers cars at the same time had increased in usage more rapidly reaching 7 million average commuters a day soon after 2010 the usage of trains has rapidly increased let me change that because i have some redundancy there continued to rapidly increase surpassing that of buses which had declined similarly expression to rail um cars also have boomed in numbers reaching 8 million by 2020. okay good now i'm a little bit short on time but i really want to get this last sentence in there for you so i've got my third and fourth data points now as well now i want to get my fifth data points here which is predicting the future okay all right notice how i do this so it is predicted that these trends will have uh followed into the future okay and here i'm using the future perfect tense so we'll have followed will have continued i don't want to use continued because i used it previously so i'm trying to paraphrase as much as possible to pick up points for lexical resource okay so it has predicted that these trends will have followed into the future and this is where you can use the whereby meaning giving more explanation whereby cars are expected to reach 9 million average commuters by 2030 trains five and buses three in summary cars and trains increase in popularity in the given years while buses decrease in popularity so a nice quick summary at the end just to really work for that band nine all right now of course i would leave a bit of time here to review okay and um you should leave some time and exam to review okay and then this i'm switching this to uh so that it reads better okay all right um so i'm going to go through from the top i've definitely reached about 220 uh words so i want to stop there okay let me erase the scribble here so you can read this clearly with me okay so here we go everyone from the top let's review this work and make sure it makes sense so this line graph compares the mean number of commuters from zero to nine million with intervals of three million among three modes of transportation cars trains and buses between the years 1970 and 2030 with intervals of a decade immediately it is clear that the usage of cars and trains follow a nearly parallel and increasing pattern over the course of the given 60 years while buses conversely decrease over these six decades as well trains and buses are used by an average similar number of passengers in the given period however cars are used significantly more at the beginning of the period in 1970 an average of 2 million commuters use trains four million road buses and five million drove cars heading into the new millennium the use of buses gradually decreased while the use of trains had increased both nearing an average of 3 million passengers cars at the same time had increased in usage more rapidly reaching 7 million average commuters a day soon after 2010 the use of trains continued to rapidly increase surpassing that of buses which had declined similarly to rail cars also have boomed in numbers reaching 8 million by 2020. it is predicted that these trends will have followed into the future whereby cars are expected to reach 9 million trains 5 million and buses 3 million average commuters by 2030. in summary cars and trains increase in popularity in the given years while buses decrease in popularity and that's it and that's where you stop okay make sure that you do that within 20 minutes if you can't don't worry about it you can still get a great band score um just cut out the least important information okay all right cool deep singh says in summary cars have been the all-time most common vehicle for commuters while most passengers dislike using buses and this will eventually decline to the lowest number however trains will become increasingly popular just a little mix-up between trains and buses they're called but otherwise quite good okay great work everyone i know it's a fast-paced class but it's academic ielts and you have to be a little bit more fast paced it's good for your comprehension as well as your fluency so push push push all right that's um that's it for this class but worry not we've got more writing coming up task two in 30 minutes and i've got a pretty interesting question at least i think so uh for the task two class so hang around um come back in 30 minutes take a short break grab a sandwich maybe a tea and learn a bit more ielts english task 2 writing with me i'll see you soon for everybody watching you can get lots more help on our websites aehelp.com gltshelp.com don't be shy sign up for our premium packages we train 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