IELTS Live - Task 1 Writing Pie Charts - Band 9 Practice

is live IELTS class my name is Adrian and I am streaming to you live from beautiful sunny Budapest here on September 15th and today we are looking at an IELTS task one writing pie charts to be specific our materials this lesson is brought to you by AE help comm for academic IELTS help and for the general version of the exam please check us out at G ie LTS help comm join our premium course with six full practice exams over a hundred hours of video lessons and six fully interactive exams just for you and an interactive course get our app academic IELTS help from your Android or Apple Play Store or App Store and if you have questions send me an email Adrian ADR I am at AE help comm Ramkumar welcome a new members just joined in good for you make sure to send me an email here with your membership level so I can hook you up with the perks I roshni good to see you in class I'm doing fantastic I hope you're doing great as well hi Omar good to see you in class hi ya alright students you can get our exam books from Amazon in digital or paperback copies search for AE helps academic IELTS or GE helps general IELTS today again we're looking at tasks one in this class followed by a speaking part three practice and strategy for everyone students without further ado let's take a look at today's question here we go IELTS task 1 writing you spend about 20 minutes on this task make sure to practice that 20 minute time limit at home when you're getting ready for the test it's very important that you take 40 minutes for task two okay so don't spend more than 20 on task 1 the following charts show urban consumption for China in two years for several categories identify the main features and make comparisons where relevant Shing Hyun good to see you in class let's take a quick peek at this graph or chart here we go it's for the country of China and it is urban consumption in 1995 and urban consumption in 2011 right away we notice that the dates are 16 years apart now we have these nice big slices we have lots of little slices and then of course we have the names and percentages for each category those are maybe a little bit small to read but that's okay you don't need to look at those details yet valiant venture hello back at you what should we do first students so you are in the writing part of the exam you're feeling a little exhausted you finished the listening you finished the reading take a deep breath refocus yourself and remember the steps this is why you should always do task one first because it is a very step-by-step response for the general IELTS the letter writing is the same so it's quite straightforward it's easier than task two so start with task 1 remember the steps right valiant venture says first things first take a deep breath okay clear your mind focus on the writing so what do we do what do we do with this question we've opened up this part of the booklet what's our step number one and some of our members that watch these classes regularly should have a pretty good idea for step number one go before after let's do it after here all right so step one is okay great so roshni says paraphrase with details Schengen sizes paraphrase the question and then a little bit later Shang Hong says with details yes so that popped into your mind Shang Hong and I'm happy that it did it should pop into your mind just the same when you are sitting in the IELTS exam right I've got a paraphrase with details that's my first step to begin writing my overview so paraphrase the question with details yeah so give it more detail don't just repeat the question in other words that gets you some marks but not as much as if you include some details so add those details valiant men sure concurs with his classmates good so let's do that let's begin the overview it is the first paragraph for task one so paraphrase this question for me members and give me some details I'll show you the pie charts here in a moment so you can do that but read it one more time so the following charts show urban consumption for China in two years for several categories identify the main features and make comparisons were relevant here is the chart again to help you with that again for this sentence you do not need to really see these small words I'll zoom in on those later but you should be looking at these big letters and maybe counting the number of slices in each of these pie charts so I'm going to do the paraphrasing with the details myself and then we'll compare I'm sure some of you are already writing so one two three four five six seven eight alright I'll stop there so again there's the there's the the chart techno phys love it fantastic welcome aboard techno fizz with a name like that I'm ecstatic to have you as a member techno fizz you're GE IELTS help account is locked I will unlock it just send me an email techno fizz I need your email address so I can unlock it and it's hard for me to stop and deal with that in a live class as I'm sure you can imagine so just send me an email here techno fizz Adrian at AE help calm and I will make sure to unlock that account for you again it's okay that you put it into the chat but I need you to send me an email to my email address and then I can unlock it okay so please do that and happy to have you as a member techno fist also tell me your membership level so I can give you the appropriate perks okay alright roshni says the two pie chart illustrate the urban utilization of eight different types of products in China between 1995 and 2011 roshni not bad two important Corrections okay watch your plurals different types right because there's eight of them I love how you use the word eight and not the number that's you don't have to in task one but it does look better and the other good or important correction roshni is not between 1995 and 2011 because that would be a line graph okay so if it's between it would be a line graph so here it has to be in 1995 and 2011 they're just two unique years there's 16 years between these two charts we have no idea what's happening in those other fourteen years so you can't say between you have to be care full and the examiners do catch that on the academic version of the exam so this is for all of our viewers make sure not to confuse talking about or describing pie charts versus line graphs okay so be very careful about that you do lose marks if it seems like you're writing about a line graph and not a pie chart okay all right but otherwise rushing that's nice okay it's good here is my paraphrase the two given pie charts depict the procurement procurement is a synonym for purchases or consumption of Chinese citizens in the years 1995 and 2011 according to eight unique categories okay so that's mine very similar to yours roshni yet still using different words amar says the two pie charts depict the differences between urban consumption in 1995 and 2011 in China right amar I think with the years there's a little bit of a funky something going on but you are on the right track Shang Hong says the given pie charts depict the people pay for in China okay Shang whom you can't do that so let me correct it the given pie charts depict the expenses of Chinese people in 1995 and 2011 with 8 different types of spending yep that's ok yeah you can do that with 8 different types of spending the people pay for it's incorrect grammar there shanking so careful with that okay expenses is the word I think that you're looking for to make that a clear sentence okay all right while we wait for more of those sentences what is our next step so for those of our members who have finished this part what's your next step what do you write next what should you do next okay and again this is kind of like a recipe you're really going step by step here as long as you have the recipe correct and you don't make too many mistakes with grammar spelling and so on then you will get a good mark for this task one by the way viewers is worth one third of your writing score dev not make an overview because this is the overview so this sentence is already the overview Danish says include the key features yeah amar it's same thing as with Deb this is already the overview so now roshni says yeah let's take a look at the key points Shang hong says what's the most obvious feature so indeed we need to identify the most obvious feature okay now maybe I'll zoom in a little bit here so that you can see the most obvious feature and I think we can just zoom in on one what do you think is the most obvious feature zooming in on this pie for 1995 okay while you write that sentence I will read yours Danish so Dana says that to the given two pie charts depict the urban expenditure for the country of China for eight different products between the years 1995 and 2011 Danish I know that you join late because you used the word between it's not between that's a line graph as these are pie charts so it's in the year 1995 and 2011 you can only compare these two years Danish you don't know the other years you don't know 1996 to 2010 you have no idea what happens there so not between but in okay and also Danish China you have to use a big C it's the name of a country if you write China with a small C in the exam you will lose marks okay so roshni says that the most obvious feature is the consumption of food yeah I would agree wha-bam look at the size of that pie it's 50% food so certainly food is the most obvious feature and I think it's the most obvious feature in in both of these both of these yep there we go okay yeah so you see that there's a slightly less money being spent on food in 2011 but it's still easily the largest slice so we don't need to go into details tomorrow yet like half the consumption because this is just the overview so all we need to state is that in both years food made up the majority of the expenditure for the Chinese populace okay so let's go back and finish up this overview I can see that Shang Hong has done that already so Shang Hong says at first glance it is evident that the most consumption is food for both 1995 and 2011 nice that's your comparison Shang Hong it's both a little bit of a grammar correction okay so at first glance it is evident that food is the most consumed product in both 1995 and 2011 okay there we go that's my overview that's it all right techno fizz this is an academic IELTS Channel although the speaking and listening are the same for both and task two writing is very similar and reading can be very similar with the third section of general this is task 1 for academic task 1 general is different check that out on our general IELTS channel ok alright roshni says overall it is very clear that the massive amount of procurement was for food in both years as compared with other products roshni that is some beautiful writing truly is hats off you are improving by leaps and bounds in the past few months so good for you yeah very good roshni I read it again I said it a little bit different but the grammar of yours is accurate also roshni so that's good all right Dana says that first glance it is clear that the most consumed product was food in both the year 1995 and 2011 Danish very happy to see a nice clear sentence from you okay you're making improvements in your grammar and that's great to see keep working on that that's the level of clarity that you want to reach that sentence right there okay so keep that going and you're going to get a very good band score a Marwadi says it seems that food has the highest consumption in 1995 amar you don't need the word digest and also amar the word seems is not necessary because it doesn't seem it is okay Seema is a bit ambiguous here it's very clear the data actually shows that food has the highest consumption in 1995 and 2011 okay after the overview comes the analysis okay or for plural it's analyses all right so before we write this paragraph we need to do what what should we do so before we get into this body paragraph what's our next step Dina says analysis yeah what do we mean by that can again follow the recipe you will do fine on the exam so what do we do for this analysis yeah so roshni says just identify key points in a logical way sign up says plan it out you're right sign up absolutely and usually it's anywhere from six to eight points roughly each one makes up about a sentence so I'm sure that all of you will say the first point is food okay so food should be our first point of comparison give it a little bit more detail here it's fifty percent here's thirty six percent okay what should we discuss after food what do you think would be what do you think would be the the next point to discuss after food okay let's see if you can let me let me zoom in a little bit on these smaller words so you can read them a little bit more okay a little bit tricky here okay there I'm gonna move it like that you should catch what I'm trying to show you so this one here is other this one is residential this is recreation educational cultural this one's transportation this one's medicine okay so what should be next Shangdong says very cleverly transportation and communication seems like the right approach for the next next one and I agree with Shang hyung on this because notice this massive change so yeah we have education and we have this other big blue slice here but really what's very interesting for us is look at this for transportation and communication it's at 5% here and it jumps to a whopping 14 percent in night or in 2011 so even though it's not a big slice here we have these bigger slices by 2011 it's a massive slice so don't just look at 1995 make sure to pay attention to 2011 as well so yeah I agree that this would be logically my second point of comparison okay now another reason students members why you want to have some good planning is because you might run out of time you might realize oh I'm writing for 20 minutes already and I still haven't talked about point 5 and 6 so you want to make sure that you write sentences and good sentences for the most important comparison so you can maximize your score okay that's very important so this one here I would talk about next okay absolutely okay now clothing as some of you recommended might be my third and fourth choice so for number three I would do clothing clothing and for number three I might kind of group another category which category may I group for number three because I have clothing here at 14% clothing here at 11% what else would be maybe noteworthy to group with clothing in a sentence using joining words like similarly or likewise okay what would you what would you logically think wait a second I can probably group this together with number three this is very close yeah so Recreation Education and Culture okay so you're gonna see three come up here is again as well yeah absolutely so recreation education culture and clothing expenditures didn't change too much from one year to the other there's not a big difference and they're also very similar to each other so this is ten percent and this is twelve percent okay now what would you do as point number four what would you do as point number four and again this is a little bit subjective so as long as you figured one and two those are arguably the two most important number three is pretty arguably it's kind of also number three number four number five we can kind of play with those some people might say oh well I'll talk about this one first others might say I'll talk about that one next and Shang Hong says yeah maybe would residential it is kind of the fifth or sixth largest category so it does make sense to discuss that next okay sure and then number five what would number five be other and residential I would never group okay that's that's an interesting suggestion roshni but I wouldn't group other and residential together in this case I think that's that's a bit awkward I would probably again focus here on medicine for number five okay so medicine number five here it doesn't make up a large portion of the pie what is interesting though is that medicine here is three percent and medicine here is seven percent so it more than doubles and even though it's not a big slice it is interesting to note that in 2011 Chinese people are spending twice as much on medicines as they are in 1995 now that could indicate health concerns that could indicate a rise in the cost of prescriptions we don't know that so we can't state that but we definitely know that it's double and that's noteworthy okay now for number six maybe this six as well for this I might keep those sentences very very short okay for household and for others but we get the right idea here so food for number one absolutely transportation communication number two makes sense so let's start writing these sentences now this planning needs to be quick okay you can't spend ten minutes like we just did in the actual exam you need to do this in two minutes okay that's all you can take to do the planning but of course doing it by yourself thinking logically you should be able to do it fast all right so let's go one point at a time let's start with food and let's begin our body paragraph food in 2011 is 36% and in 1995 it's 50% okay they'll begin writing your first sentences for food and then we shall compare as we dare okay here we go we're gonna do the same so I'll give you a chance to write in silence here all right so that's my sentence there Danish is ahead of the curve Danish says at closer inspection food product brought in the most utilization 50% in 1995 and 36% in 2011 which is a drop of 13% alright Danish it's not bad it's very mathematical ideally you are translating these numbers into more of a human dialect okay so at a closer inspection food products were the most utilized at half of the total in 1995 and at 36% in 2011 with a difference of 13% maybe something like that Danish might be a little bit easier on the mind Amara says in 1995 a food has half of the pie at 50% while it has 36% in 2011 Amara it's not bad you don't need to include 50% when it's exactly half and in this case it is exactly half so stating that it's 50% is kind of redundant it's repetitive we don't need to include that Raj says according to both pie charts we can see that transportation took second place in increased data Raj that's not clear you need to write that clearer okay we'll get to that in a moment dev says it is clear that food has the largest consumption in 1995 and 2011 making up 50 and 60 percent of the pies respectively yeah that's very good to have 50% and 36% there's a little bit missing there dev I would say 50% and 36% of the total respectively and you need a comma before respectively they have always when respectively is the last word in your sentence Dev you that comma okay it's missing punctuation if you have too many punctuation mistakes Dev you will lose marks all right careful roshni says s stated in 1995 the percentage of food intake was considerably substantial with half of the total subsequently in 2011 this figure dropped to just over a third at 36% roshni not bad you're writing quite complex sentence is there take note of my Corrections okay so here is my sentence when observing the PI's in more detail it becomes up there's missing punctuation there right here we go comma because I have a subordinate clause first so when observing the PI's in more detail it becomes obvious that food made up half of the costs in 1996 however in 2011 it was just over a third at 36% and if I want to be even more accurate with my punctuation I would do that because this is a description of this so over a third comma describe at 36% period alright so here we have the pie charts again students and now as we discussed we're going to look at transportation and communication here it's 5% and transportation and communication here is 14% go ahead and write that next sentence while I look at vanity Shang Hong and techno fizzes responses okay so go ahead write your sentences for transportation communication five and 14% vanity says upon keener examination of the two pie charts it can be observed that food takes the highest expenditure at 50% of the whole in 1996 semicolon space vanity space after the semicolon and less than a third at 36% 16 years prior in 2011 our vanity I think you have the years mixed up there it's 50% in 1995 and 36 percent in 2011 16 years later not prior vanity a 16 years prior means before so later not prior that confused me okay careful vanity with word choice mistakes those can really cost you because you lose comprehension so you're like prior what just like what happened with me so 16 years later in 2011 okay so careful with that prior means before shang hong says looking at the Pisan greater detailed the highest consumption for food was half of the spending in 1996 however it was over it was just over a third at 36% in 2011 shang home you're missing the year 2011 that is important and you should use the word just over a third because it's relatively less than the previous comparison of 1995 students this is 1995 not 96 okay yeah and vanity that's totally that's great so if you caught that mistake that's fine in the real exam all you want to do is just quickly cross it out and then write later never leave a mistake like that unanswered okay yeah techno i'll pull up my email one more time for you okay and then I'll unlock your account a little bit later today so there it is one more time techno fizz Adrian ADR I am at AE help calm okay just send me an email and I'll check it out and unlock your account okay so one more time this Adrian a DRI a n @a e help calm okay all right so that second sentence all right so just really quickly the greatest notable difference in the two years is in the consumption of transportation and communication which is 5% in 1995 and nearly triple in 2011 at 14% now because transportation and communication is a category heading you can actually write that as capitals like that okay and even food it's okay but also because they're proper nouns you could just write them in lowercase letters as well so up to you your choice there I prefer lowercase myself but it is technically correct to write them in uppercase also alright just giving you some extra little tidbits there roshni says surprisingly there was a meagre quantity of transportation and communication utilized by Chinese with 5% in 1995 but this tripled in 2011 yeah roshni you have to include in 1995 there that's missing information and it's quite confusing if you don't identify that it's 5% in 1995 okay if you don't want to keep writing 1995 like roshni like I don't want to do 1 9 9 5 all the time you can actually write it like this as well okay so in 95 so you use the apostrophe and then 95 that's another way to kind of save yourself a little bit of time and also make your writing a bit more interesting okay so Danish says interestingly transportation and communication was just 5% in 1995 then a significant spike to thrice in 2011 which became the second highest consumed product that's very clever Dana that you identified that it does become the second most consumed product in 1995 for urban areas one point that we've been missing throughout this essay is that this is urban consumption so it's not all of China but its consumption in the cities of China so as opposed to the countryside so it's urban consumption now if you realize that mistake you're like oh I forgot to include the word urban that's okay you can still do that in the summary or you can go back to the overview and stick it in somewhere strategically okay all right Shang hong says interestingly transportation and communication increased triple from five percent in ninety five to fourteen percent okay so Shang Hong and Dana's this is for both of you using the word spiked and using the word increased is very very dangerous because we don't know that that's more for line graphs so you should use the word changed or tripled but not increased because maybe here just imagine for a moment that in 2002 transportation and communication is 3% so if this were a line graph it means that it would go down and then go up right so 1995 2002 and 2011 so this would not be an increase because there could be a decrease but we don't know this year we don't know those 16 years so be very careful with using vocabulary that's designed for line graphs and not for pie charts it's one of the most common mistakes for students on the exam is their writing about pie charts the same way as line graphs but those are two different types of data okay so again just a reminder to be very careful about that okay you cannot assume the unknown years in business that would be a very danger mistake to make it could cost the company millions of dollars okay so careful all right so number three is clothing recreation Education and Culture whoo it's a mouthful so clothing here is 14% recreational is 10% here it's 12% and clothing is 11% okay let's write about those be clever in your wording try to write one or two sentences that's able to describe those two slices in both of your in both of those years okay all right Omar I don't see yours for this second point so maybe you miss typing it in but I don't see it in the chat okay vanity Sean says transportation and communication has the most notable change which is 5% in 1995 and almost triple in consumption in the urban areas in 2011 vanish Sean that is a beautiful sentence you're making sure to include the concept of urban areas it's grammatically correct you're using language which is appropriate for pie charts which is change and you're using nice human language saying it's tripling in 2011 so vanity that is a band 9 sentence okay Omar I'll keep scrolling up to try to catch yours let's see oh yeah I see it amar there it is okay from 1995 to 2011 the percentage of Transportation use and communication more than doubled from 14 to 15 percent amar it's not bad but almost tripled is more accurate than more than doubled right more than doubled would be like 11 or 12 but 14 is almost tripled okay so careful with your word choice it's not incorrect amar but it's better to say almost tripled okay all right students so let's focus on that point three with clothing recreation culture clothing recreation education and culture there I'm going to create that sentence while you're thinking okay oh I lost you there but don't worry I'll get you back while I'm riding away here we go camera seems to like snoozing a little bit sometimes not to worry you get a little bit of a break looking at my daughter's cute little happy face there my desktop there we go all right gives you a little bit of extra time to think here we go with the end of this sentence all right so here's my sentence as well education recreation and culture and clothing made up significant portions of expenditures for both years with little change each category roughly at 10% of the total now a little change here's maybe a little bit awkward with little difference we're little differences is a little bit better word choice there then change again change can be tricky so be more like a line graph danish thank you yes she's the joy and the light of my life she's very very she's quite the little cutie she's my little princess dana says sir if we used was then can we also use has and have will it affect your score danish you can so using has and have present perfect does work okay depending on what your sentence is what in what context you're using it you can so you can move between past tense and present perfect absolutely depending on the context and of course yes you should be careful of how you're using it certainly yeah okay but you can use it so if you're referring to the actual years as opposed to the chart itself then it's okay to use past simple or present perfect all right so while you're thinking about those sentences I'm just gonna keep going forward here and I'm going to discuss residential okay just I want to make sure that we're get to the end of this task one for all of our viewers as well and I'll keep referring back to what you're right now residential is at eight percent in nineteen ninety five and it's at nine percent in 2011 okay so all right Shangdong says from observing clothing recreation education and culture there were slight differences compared to 10% compared with 10% for both categories mm-hmm excuse me losing my voice Shang Hong it's not bad I need to do a little bit of a correction so observing clothing recreation education and culture they were slightly different at around 10% for both categories in both years that's how I would finish that sentence Shanghai okay all right my sentence for residential is residential costs also stayed fairly similar in both years for urban areas of China at 8% in 1995 and 9% in 2011 vanity Sean says similarly clothing recreation education and culture take up less than 15% of the total expenses with minimal changes in both years vanity that's really nice I love how you're able to compare those two categories with the 14% of communication transportation costs at the end of your last sentence it's very clever it's very very good writing I'm always happy to see those clever clever sentences from you vanity Omar says residential has the same consumption in both here's not the same category Omar but the same consumption okay category doesn't make sense there roshni says indeed clothing and recreation Education and Culture meanwhile falling from 14 and 10 percent in 1995 respectively to something in something percent in 2011 with negligible difference yeah that's good now roshni you have to decide how much time you have left for your task 1 make sure that you have enough time to go into those details if you don't then keep it a little bit shorter so this is where you really need to time yourself roshni if you can get that information on the paper in the 20 minutes great do it if not simplify okay alright so now I'm going to so I've written up for residential here my sentence and I'm going to jump to medicine so medicine is at 3 percent in 1995 and 7 percent in 2011 ok so I'm going to write a sentence for that kay so conversely expenses paid for medicine are more than double in 2011 and 7% compared with only 3% in 95 alright so again keeping my sentence is fairly simple just making sure to get those points out okay now I have household facilities and other and in this case maybe I can group them I can ignore them I'm probably at around a hundred and seventy eighty words anyway so if I want to mention something about household facilities and other I would just say and if I'm running out of time especially something simple like household Kame so if I have enough time I would write a household facilities make up 7% of both pies and the category of other the remaining three and four percent respectively now if I don't have enough time I might just ignore that information I can still get a very good band I can certainly still get a bad 8 maybe even 8.5 perhaps even a 9 okay I don't need to have every single little detail in my task 1 response because remember students members the question says identified the main features and make comparisons were relevant household facilities both pies 7% it's not too relevant the category of other at 3 and 4% is not relevant at all so if you miss writing about other nobody will really care ok as long as you have good clean writing you will still get a nice high band score now I might want to include a summary if I still have time and if I'm going for that band 9 and it might sound something like this okay so there is my summary to sum up after careful analysis of both pie charts it is evident that some of the expenses in urban areas of China stayed the same like clothing and household facilities while others like food and transportation and communication differ drastically okay so that is my full response and members my apologies if I can't get to your remaining responses but don't be shy threat not it's great that you're practicing let's read the response together make sure it makes sense the two given pie charts depict the procurement of Chinese citizens in the years 1995 and 2011 in urban areas according to eight unique categories immediately it is clear that food is the greatest consumed product in both 1995 and 2011 when observing the pies in more detail it becomes obvious that food made up half of the costs in 1996 however in 2011 it was just over a third at 36% the greatest notable difference in the two years is in the consumption of transportation and communication which is 5% in 1995 and nearly triple in 2011 at 14% as well education recreation and Culture and clothing made up significant portions of expenditures for both years with little differences each category roughly at 10% of the total residential costs also stayed fairly similar in both years for urban areas of China at 8% in 95 and 9% in 2011 conversely expenses paid for medicine or more than double in 2011 at 7% compared with only 3% in 95 household facilities make up 7% of both pies and the category of other is the remaining three and 4% respectively to sum up after careful analysis of both pie charts it is evident that some of the expenses in urban areas of China stayed the same like clothing and household facilities while others like food and transportation and communication differ drastically that is your full essay I'll post that on the community chat with the word count as well so you can review it excellent participation today members I am very very pleased with your responses and your ability to analyze and report these features so hats off my invisible tipping of the hat to you coming up in 30 minutes we will continue with speaking part three examples students viewers join us at AE help comm for academic IELTS and Gi LTS help comm for general keep up the good work speaking writing reading listening in English effectively and intelligently is to your advantage you will be the better for it keep up the good work and see you in the next class bye for now

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Published: Sun Sep 15 2019