IELTS Live - Task 1 Writing – Combination Graph Band 9

hi students and welcome to today's live ielts class my name is adrian and i'm streaming to you from the heart of europe i hope everybody has had a good week so far hi dhruv hi kawal hi kushi sandeep hi an nice to see students in the class hi abhishek welcome members in this class students we are focusing on task one writing specifically looking at a combination graph and of course our materials are presented to you by ae help dot com for academic english and ielts success visit us there for general ielts check us out at g ieltshelp.com that's generalisehelp.com on both of our websites we have loads and loads of materials for you now this class is specifically for academic ielts for general adults you can also always check out our general alts youtube channel it's called general ielts help and you will find some task 1 videos and examples there for lots of materials visit our websites this is ahelp.com you can click that big red button to join the premium package and get access to all of our materials and you can use this code to get a 20 discount today r for t y j that'll give you a 20 discount on the premium package um and for the general ielts you can use that same code here on this website with the green background same layout gl's help dot com students we do have apps of course in our apps link to our websites for academic ielts a help dot com you can link the app academic guides help for gltshelp.com you can link the app general ielts help and if you have questions just send me an email to adrian ae help dot com hi catherine pang hi emanjot hi aditya nice to see many more students joining in on this class so task one today we have more classes for you tomorrow and the day after let's start getting more into our task one here hi eugen love the emojis mentioned the panda bear yesterday's class all right so here we go task one you get to the writing section of your exam you are well into the test you've finished your listening you finished your reading at this point you take a bit of a breath you reset yourself and you remember your strategies so you open the writing section of the exam and this is what you see you always start with task one never start with task two uh task one should be easier what kind of an essay is task one everybody anybody uh students who are regularly in this class should know the answer to this i hardiek sotaria um what kind of essay are you writing what is this category of essay there are four major essay types in literature in the english language this is one of them it's not a report report is a type of this uh un says it's an expository essay yeah report is a type of expository essay it's a subcategory okay so it's an expository essay and you're partly reporting but that's not necessarily so reporting like journalism that's more um specific so this is an expository essay and uh what's the voice okay so what voice am i using in this essay okay there are three voices first second third person voice what am i using not passive voice of beer i might at some point um and for now it's just pegasus the third uh yeah third person yeah that's right third person objective uh voice of author that means you do not use uh i me you us we don't use those kinds of words okay stay in the third person uh voice all right good okay so let's have a look at this specific question now okay if you're not familiar with expository essays and third person voice definitely research that find out more about it you can do that on our websites or of course mother google will give you a lot of information about that as well it's basics of literature and writing okay uh here we go so you should spend about 20 minutes on this task definitely only spend that 20 minutes because uh task one is worth one third of your mark task two is worth two thirds theoretically okay now if you completely bomb task one it's virtually impossible to get over a band six so um you need to do a good job in task one okay here we go so the line graph shows the change in the amount of electricity used during a day in two seasons and the pie chart indicates the different uses of electricity okay so something about electricity we all pay utility bills we all pay for electricity so these are common kinds of questions describe the main features and make comparisons were relevant okay write at least 150 words so that means minimum 150 words so this means you must write minimum 150 words for task completion okay so task 1 task 2 you get graded on what's called task completion okay part of task completion is the word limit now let me give you a hint here 150 words is minimum for task completion but it's unlikely that you're going to get full marks at 150 words okay so keep in mind that most if not all band 8 and 9 and even seven to be perfectly honest with you so bands seven eight and nine essays are 20 to 25 over the minimum okay so that means that most of the higher band essays are getting closer to the 180 90 200 mark for word count okay keep that in mind all right here's our graph um first of all uh our line graph hopefully you can see that i know it's a little bit let me see if i can enhance the sharpness here for you i mean it is a line graph so you don't need uh too much here maybe a little bit this way all right there we go i'm trying to make it clear um but don't don't worry i'll make a little bit darker here yeah let's make it like that okay a little bit clearer um i'll i'll explain it anyway you'll see it it's not too complex okay so this top line this is winter and this bottom line is summer all right and then here you have the units of electricity so this is units of electricity okay here and you have ten thousand twenty thousand thirty thousand forty thousand fifty thousand it's actually good that i'm rewriting it uh here it just says typical demand for electricity you probably see that and then under here underneath you have the hours of the day so you have at zero o'clock three o'clock six o'clock nine o'clock 12 o'clock 15 o'clock 18 o'clock you'll also hear 1800 hours 2100 hours and then midnight 2400 hours so that's what that graph looks like okay all right so that's the first graph so have a good look at it i'm not going to redraw it every time you should be able to kind of get the idea of it okay and then we have another graph so this is a combination graph okay so here we go with the second graph let's take a look at that um this is what the electricity is used for uh in winter let's see if i can just gonna do a little bit of adjusting here maybe i can get it a bit sharper free okay let's do that okay all right so make it bigger a smaller graph okay hopefully you can see it a little bit better now um so this is the pie chart and this is what the electricity is used for so you have the pie here you have a slice at 15 percent you have another slice at 15 percent you have one at 17.5 percent and you have one at 52.5 uh percent okay uh this is heating rooms and water not too important this is ovens washing machines okay um this is lighting tv radio okay and then this is electric tools okay all right so that's what that's our second graph there all right um so we have four different categories heating rooms and water ovens kettles washing machines lighting tv radio vacuum cleaners food mixers electric tools okay sure so those are the four different categories of using electricity in the winter okay that's important the title using electricity in the winter okay all right so uh let's do this together uh it's really a step-by-step process and i'm going to show you uh what is the most common situation for these kinds of combination graphs so you can write them quickly and accurately the first step of course is the overview okay you do not need a separate introduction the overview is a paraphrase of the question with more detail and then the second part okay it's two parts plus the most observable features okay and it's in some ways it's actually kind of good that these graphs aren't a hundred percent clear because it will force you to give me the correct information uh for this overview so try this everyone first paraphrase this question and give it more detail based on what i just showed you in these graphs so the line graph shows the change in the amount of electricity used during a day in two seasons and the pie chart indicates the different uses of electricity describe the main features and make comparisons were relevant so paraphrase this uh give it more detail okay there's the line graph again do it kind of like that you don't really need to see too much details here and i think it's clear enough i think now for everyone i can see it in my feedback screen okay so let's see what you come up with and i'm going to write as well of course and then we'll match up and see if we're on the same page so abhay says the given two figures depict the utilization of electricity for different kinds of purposes as well as the amount of use of electricity um in winter and summer seasons in a day okay up hey that's okay up hey you should keep the order the same so my first tip is in your writing always keep the order the same as the order of the graphs top down okay here we have the line graph first and then you have the pie chart so abhay you should always write about the line graph first and then the pie chart so don't write about the different reasons first and then the winter summer seasons of the day but right about the winter summer's day seasons first and then the pie charts starting from the overview and continuing in the analysis okay so this is my first tip um keep this in mind students that i don't want to say always but it should be always and in most cases in every ielts example that i've seen the first graph is more general information and the second graph is more detailed information so this is a very important tip okay very very important triple exclamation mark for these combination graphs okay in most cases the first graph we can say the top one okay is more general information and the second graph or chart is more specific or detailed information the bottom one let's put that back here so the second graph in this case the pie chart is more detailed information in connection to the first one especially when they are different graphs like pie chart followed by tables or in this case line graph followed by pie chart okay so this means keep your writing in the same order as the graphs for the overview and the body and the summary okay is that clear is everybody clear on the importance of understanding that the first graph is more general information the second one is more specific in connection to that and you want to keep the same order okay it's very important all right hopefully that's clear for everyone all right and says yes clear yeah and when you look at most of these examples you'll see that okay lepay says the line graph presents the variation of electricity consumed in a day in the summer versus a day in the winter as well a pie chart depicts the distribution of electricity used by various appliances or applications um used in various applications lipay used in various applications os says the given graph explains the change in the quantity of power in summer through a throughout a 24 hour period and the second uh explains the percentage of power consumed in winter as heating and lights and vacuum yeah the first one also shows winter os so careful not to miss information but you're on the right track okay rashika says the given line graph describes electricity consumption both in winter and summer the pie chart depicts the amount of electricity uh relating to four different usages in a household jawan tried to use english in an english lesson okay all right looking good so far students so yeah you want to uh when you're giving your overview you want to include um the kind of measures on the y-axis on the x-axis the information in the legend so that's your summary um here we have uh four different categories in the legend okay so that's what we want to include in our overview and if you can't do that in one sentence that's okay do it in two so the line graph depicts the let me make sure i'm using different words here depicts the movement of power consumption throughout a 24 hour period with intervals of three hours in both winter and summer seasons the pie chart delineates the distribution of electrical or of electricity uh usage in winter into four specified categories okay so all i did here is i used the information from the axes the y and the x-axis i used the information from the legends to create more detail and i'm paraphrasing so i'm taking the words from the question and i'm uh using synonyms antonym negatives different descriptors to paraphrase as much as possible so the line graph depicts the movement of power consumption throughout a 24-hour period with intervals of three hours in both winter and summer seasons now if i want to give um more information here i can say uh from 0 to 50 000 units okay so as i reviewed that i realized that hey wait a second i didn't mention the y-axis and here the y-axis is zero to 50 000 units and i can even go more detailed than say with intervals of 10 000 units okay intervals means 10 000 10 000 10 000 10 000 where the difference between measures is equal and here we have equal 10 000 unit measure differences for those of you going into computer science engineering psychology statistics learning these words is very very useful so here you have intervals of three three three to six three six to nine three nine to twelve three twelve to fifteen three fifteen to eighteen and so on to twenty four okay and here you have four categories that give us specific information okay everybody's clear on that hopefully okay all right everybody good on how i added those details with um looking at the axes looking at the legend for the overview because that's how i'm overviewing this okay all right yeah everybody's good amanja says it's clear fantastic okay nice great okay so now um we're looking for uh the main features okay so uh what's the main feature when we look at the line graph what do we notice um right away there's something very very clear here what would be the main feature ahn says at first sight it is clear that electrical power is used more in winter time than summertime and in winter heating is the greatest motive when it comes to electrical consumption okay uh on i think that will work okay for dav says overall it is clear that electricity is used twice less um go for the opposite for dogs go for twice as much okay so overall it is clear that electricity is used twice as much in the winter than in the summer and more than half of the electricity power utilized is utilized for heating rooms in winter yeah for dobs good you're recognizing kind of the main chunks there very good okay excellent that's exactly what you should be observing at first sight so fennel says most of the electricity is consumed for heating however winter energy consumption at night is maximum fennel too much detail and you should be talking about the line graph first and then the pie chart as i mentioned earlier in your overview in your main feature in your analyses okay david says it's evident that both lines follow a similar trends uh winter is greater though um i don't think the trends are quite the same we have a dip here we have an increased dip here we have an increased dip here we have an increase slight increase to a peak here and then we have a very rapid decline we have a slight decline here so yeah i think david there's some similarity but i don't think they're quite the same i don't think that's a main feature so careful with that here we see summer peaking out at twenty thousand units right twenty thousand unit peak twenty thousand unit peak we see that at first glance um here we see winter uh kind of touching forty thousand in two points here and then even going above so it appears that winter in most cases is at least double that of summer for energy consumption that's definitely one of the main features okay and then as many of you correctly stated in the pie chart so if we look at the pie chart we have three slices that are fairly equal okay so this slice this slice this slice look about the same and then we have this gigantic slice here that's really dominant that's what i'm getting just by looking at this without really looking at the percentages just looking at the main pictorial features okay that's really what you're looking at here these pictorial features you shouldn't be going into details for your main features for the overview okay so the overview is as follows for the main features at first glance it is clear that winter usage of electricity on average is at least double that of summer furthermore in winter three categories have similar levels of electrical application while the fourth is the fourth we can even throw in the word heating is dominant okay all right so that would be my main feature analysis okay and then i can go into more details here now clearly these two graphs together are focusing more on winter than summer okay so the second graph the pie chart is specifically focusing on winter okay the first graph is 50 focusing on winter 50 focusing on summer so i have to recognize that and it's good to do that because then i know that i have to focus my words more on the concept of winter than summer okay it's very important is everybody okay so far is everybody following me okay jawan please don't spam with emojis i'm just gonna time you out there for a bit so you realize what i'm talking about and then when you come back please focus on the lesson okay all right so everybody's following me so far if you're not don't worry you can go back and revisit this lesson later again okay singh says hi david says sure nikhil for dobbs uh much taba fennel lepay are on board lee says yep hardik's good come on shots on board all right good okay so now we go into analysis and when you have 20 minutes 180 words two graphs you can't report every little detail okay so you have to be pretty careful here all right okay so what should i report what should i report how should i start this okay can anybody tell me what would be my first point of analysis what would make logical sense if i'm thinking ahead if i'm predicting this what should i report while you're telling me that i'll redraw this some of you are saying it's a little bit light so it's okay okay this is winter this is uh summer okay zero hours three hours six hours nine hours 12 hours 15 hours 18 hours 21 hours 24 hours and this is zero 10 000 units 20 000 units of electricity 30 000 units of electricity forty thousand units of electricity so what should be my first point here okay so shu shirat says start from summer okay yeah sharad i agree with you i think starting from summer it's a good idea okay why would i start from summer so uh ship shot saying let's start with summer first let's start from here this should be my first point of analysis okay um i'm not going to go into like all of this description here because that's useless it's really fluctuating between fifteen thousand and twenty thousand okay so is the fluctuation and i have two peaks i have a peak at 1500 hours so 1 b at 1500 hours and then i have another peak at 2400 hours uh this would be 1c okay 1b meaning my one first point b this is my first point c this second peak okay and that's at 20 000 okay um so at most of the day it's at 15 000 and then it peaks at 1500 hours or at three o'clock 3 p.m and at midnight in the summer time right love jeep thanks so much for your super chat donation i see that um love g so lovejit's asking a little bit of an off-topic question but i will address that especially since you're kind enough to sponsor us so lovejit if you have a speech disorder you need to get um proof of your speech disorder from a speech specialist or your doctor and when you apply for your ielts exam there's a special place to indicate any kind of learning disability or speaking disability or dyslexia like stammering or stuttering and as long as you have a professional who is able to give you proof that that you have that you can't just say i have this help me um then they will give you extra time they will consider that when they're marking you for your pronunciation and for your fluency so but you need a professional's um proof okay so from a speech therapist or from a doctor or some psychologist or something like that okay all right thank you for that uh donation okay so keep that in mind all right but you need to do that beforehand when you apply okay if it's not clear send me a message okay so i'm canadian west coast victoria okay so this would be my first point now my second point would obviously be winter now winter is a little bit more detailed so uh winter i would start here with a line okay so that would be my two i would definitely mention this low point uh somewhere around nine a.m okay then this increase here and this peak at nearly 50 000 at 21 o'clock so that would be my uh 2c and then i this decline here would be my 2 d so these would be my points students before you begin writing your analysis for your line graphs or whatever chart you're looking at always check your points why am i talking first about summer so as a couple of students correctly suggested starting with summer is a good idea okay omniscient never add your own ideas okay you shouldn't do that uh ship shirat we shouldn't start with summer because it has less fluctuations why should we start with summer why is that the best strategy here i really want somebody to tell me that before i give you the answer it's not because there's less fluctuations that's not the most logical reason malika it's not what you prefer it's what makes most sense okay why does it make most sense to start with summer think a little bit ahead in your essay always try to conceptualize yeah nick hill very good so nick hill says it's because the line graph uh has just summer okay so uh remember that um the next graph as we know by now uh has to do with winter okay so what i want i'm just gonna erase this we'll write that in a second um or in a moment uh so what i want for my essays structure because you're being marked on this coherence and task completion and so on so the overall quality so what i want is summer line graph in the essay followed by winter line graph okay followed by winter pie chart so it makes more sense than if i have this up here and it goes winter summer winter okay think about your reader yeah wang jinji absolutely it makes more sense okay does that make more sense now right so it's better to go summer winter winter or summer winter details of winter than to go winter summer details of winter okay yeah and the simplicity of summer of course adds to that for sure okay uh so let's do this so let's write about summer and so we get into our analysis now right about summer i'm going to do the same we got to move along right now a little bit so we can get into this essay more okay so we're writing the analysis okay so in the analysis first we write about summer and what's happening here okay remember this is zero o'clock 15 o'clock 24 o'clock 20 000 units and roughly in the middle here it's about 15 000 units okay all right so this is your main body paragraph and it's your analyses for plural okay all right so that's my summer that's all it is for summer okay let's see if anybody has something similar okay um amanja says looking at more details the usage of power was fifteen thousand during the hot weather during uh the warmer summer months okay stay in summer amanja we don't want to say warm weather because in india and southern part of the world you have hot weather at different times of the year right david says looking at the graph in more detail comma david it is evident that from summer the consumption of energy flattened out during the first 15 hours at around 17 000 units good david keep going from there it's a good start okay it's a good start right all right for dob says analyzing deeper it can be seen that electricity is consumed about eighteen thousand units at twelve o'clock at night and then its demand decreases until nine am okay all right uh this is what i have so i kept it fairly simple looking at the line graph in detail the average daily usage of summertime electricity hovers mostly at 15 000 units if i want to be even more accurate i can say mostly around okay hovers means it stays kind of close uh to that line okay so hovers mostly around 15 000 units with two spikes in the day reaching 20 000 units one at 15 o'clock and the other at midnight so all i've done here is described this line which hovers close to this fifteen thousand unit line with two spikes one two one at fifteen o'clock well roughly fifteen o'clock let's say and the other one at 24 o'clock ielts is not going to be so specific to say well that's more like 14 o'clock they don't care about that okay all right hassan says that it is evident that during the summer season the electricity usage remains between 20 and 15 000 and it peaks at 3 pm and midnight hassan perfect okay unkit let me know what your doubt is if i catch it in the chat i'll let you know okay kowal says commencing with summer uh electrical usage shows an average of 15 000 units of electricity with two peak hours reaching 20 000 units 1500 hours and midnight you don't need first and second because that's clear from the information okay so winter here we go winter has greater movement or greater change throughout the day than summer okay so i'm going to talk about that right away and i'm going to give these specific numbers as well okay fluctuating between 30 000 all the way up to almost 50 000 right so in contrast winter use of electricity fluctuates more between 30 000 and nearly 50 000 units throughout the day okay that's it so just saying you know it moves between 30 000 and almost 50 000 okay um so now i can get into the actual pattern itself so at three o'clock it's forty thousand decreases to uh thirty thousand between six and nine and then increases peaking at twenty one hundred hours at nearly uh fifty thousand okay so that's what i want to do okay that's what i want to describe so not too much detail but enough that you're giving a good interpretation of the graph so at 3 am 40 000 units of power are used which then decreases to 30 000 units over the next six hours and then climbs back up to nearly 50 000 units by 9 pm okay after which time it rapidly decreases until midnight this is for the band nine students okay you can definitely get a high band even if you don't add that little tidbit there all right now i see some good writing coming up that's fantastic onur says electric consumption in winter surges between 30 and nearly 50 000 units of electricity in the day it has two peak points at 3 am and nearly 50 000 units at 9pm okay with 40 and 50 000 units respectively okay 40 and 50 000 units respectively okay all right now some students might choose to do a new paragraph here that's okay i think if you join the two paragraphs together that's okay too you're not going to lose marks on that okay so interpreting the winter usage of electricity further just over half of all power 52.5 percent is used to heat water and rooms okay so now i'm going into my pie chart notice that transition now it's very smooth winter to winter okay interpreting the winter usage of electricity further just over half of all power descriptive clause comma comma 52.5 is used to heat water and rooms okay that's this pie chart here and i'm talking about this big blue element here that's 52.2 percent heating rooms and water now i have 15 for vacuum cleaners mixers electrical tools and another 15 for lighting tv and radio making up a third of this pie with equal amounts of power used for these okay vacuum cleaners food mixers electrical tools and then the other one is ovens kettles washing machines what are these so what is an oven a kettle a washing machine okay what is a vacuum cleaner food mixer electrical tool so ovens kettles washing machines it kind of sounds like we're talking about larger appliances and we're talking about appliances that use electricity to heat to generate heat okay here vacuum cleaners food mixers electrical tools are more the smaller appliances that are not used for generating heat okay all right so keep that in mind larger appliances smaller appliances okay so smaller appliances lighting tv radio use about the same percentage of power in winter months okay making up a roughly a third of the total all right so okay so there we go interpreting the winter usage of electricity further just over half of all power 52.5 percent is used to heat water and rooms smaller appliances like vacuum cleaners and electrical tools and lights and tv radio use the same proportion of electricity that together make up roughly a third of the total the remaining 17.5 percent of power during winter is dedicated to larger appliances such as washing machines and ovens which generate heat everybody with me so far okay should sherrod has a question should there be more usage in summer than winter because uh we hardly use acs and refrigerators uh ship shirat it doesn't tell us where this is it could be london it could be new york it's probably a colder part of the world i would doubt that this is the data for uh adelaide australia or for [Music] new delhi or for any of the warmer parts of the world okay all right so uh what can we summarize about this we should have a bit of a summary here now your summary should not be a conclusion you're not giving an opinion okay so not an opinion uh just a simple fact that we learn by looking at the data and it's not a repeat of the overview or analysis okay so what can we summarize here all right when we've looked at all of this information in the line graph and in the pie chart and we combine all of this information and put it all together we've interpreted we've understood this information now what can we um what can we understand from this banu i'm giving you a band 9 here and a band 9 is going to be closer to 200 words for sure okay i don't think it's quite 240 just yet okay but band nine essays are going to be definitely well over the 150 minimum so negaman says to sum up people use electricity for various reasons uh during different seasons okay uh kind of on the right track un try to word that better hassan says in summary a typical household uses most electricity for facilities to function during the day okay hassan try to get winter summer hardik says all in all more units of electricity are used during the winter rather than summer as well as over half of the proportion is used for heating okay um nick hill says in summary power consumption is more in the winter than in summer mm-hmm okay i would write something like this in summary you okay how about that so i'm not really adding my own information here but this is something we can get uh from the data let's see if uh kim has that the most of energy consumption by people in the cold season with major contribution to heating and water yeah you're on the right track chem zone just a little bit better wording here but you're very similar to mine so in summary it can be inferred learn this expression it can be inferred from looking at the line graph and pie chart that a large portion of the increased power consumption during the winter months results from heating rooms and water can we all agree on that that it's not too far for the imagination or from the information in the data here that that's what's resulting i mean we had somebody say that wouldn't it be higher in the summer because of ac yeah that's because you're probably living in a part of the world where it's very hot right so you can't include your own opinion but this isn't really an opinion the data is there okay all right and amanja it's not a conclusion it's a summary we're simply making an inference here an inference here means an educated summary of what we see okay all right everyone so that is the graph i think if i remove all of my instructional information i have roughly um 210 words here i could probably uh shorten this a little bit but again for band nine sc you're going to be much closer to this number than 150 okay 150 is the minimum for task completion right so this is a band 9. if you don't have all of this information you can still get a very good band just have most of this connection and this structure as long as you have this structure and you have the overall content of this essay you will still get a band 7.5 and eight for lots more students help with the ielts for many more videos with me with other students with instructors visit our websites join our premium package at aehealth.com for 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