IELTS/TOEFL Writing Task 2 ESSAY based on preference

[Music] [Music] [Music] [Music] hi everybody and you're very welcome to our los angeles english school youtube channel if you don't know me my name is helen i'm head teacher here at los angeles english school and i'm also an isles and toefl trainer here i prepare students for aisles and toefl so i see that uh some of you have already joined me and it's really encouraging thanks very much for joining me today because we are having the live stream and it's very nice to see that some people have joined us so thanks guys and if you are here let me know and say hi in the chat box please and also let me know where you are from all right so guys um today we're going to be talking about essay writing and you know probably if you are interested in ielts or toefl uh that the assay for toefl and aisles is the same so the assay i mean writing task number two and it doesn't matter if you are preparing for general aisles or academic aisles or you're preparing for toefl because writing task number two is identical so there are some little differences but overall it's the same also i'd like to ask you if you are interested in aisles or toefl so let me know in the chat box please so what are you preparing for is it isles or tofu [Music] so i can see someone is preparing ahmad from egypt is preparing for tofu alex is preparing for isle so i can see that some people prepare for tofu and some for aisles and this is great because we're going to talk about two exams today and basically as i said before the writing task is the same so you don't have to worry about anything and it doesn't matter if you're preparing for the aisles or toefl just for me to know what people joined me today also if you haven't subscribed to this youtube channel yet but you'd like to get notified of all our upcoming lessons and live streams make sure to hit the subscribe button and the bell icon of course alright guys so let's dive into our uh essay preparation and i'm gonna share my presentation with you today so you can see here the title how to write essay based on preference so we're going to take a look at this type of essay because there are many different ways how you can write an essay and on our youtube channel we have um several live streams on essay writing already and if you are interested you can watch them so we we looked at different ways of essay organization um advantages disadvantages also reasons but here today we will take a look on assay based on preference so and we will concentrate on this layout and plan and everything all right so hopefully now you can see me and guys first of all we'll take a look at a little differences so aisles and toefl so as i said the writing test number two is identical yes it's true there are only a few differences and the first difference is timing so for aisles you will be giving 40 minutes to write your essay so it's a little bit more than for toefl because for toefl you will be given only 30 minutes so write in test number two aisles 40 minutes toefl 30 minutes yeah so if you are preparing for toefl it's gonna be harder for you all right and scoring system so aisles the highest score is nine and for toefl the highest score is five or also it can be converted into 30. so for the examiner the examiner is going to be evaluating your tofu assay based on five scale criteria but you will see the converted score and the maximum will be 30. so these are just small differences that's it actually these are only two differences also there are different evaluation criteria so you can look at these criteria on the official ielts preparation site or ielts side or toefl site but today i'm going to show you the overall description so i just made it easier and basically the descriptions are the same for aisles and tofu and this is what you need to be careful with so the first one is development so development is how well you address the topic so you will see the topic of the essay address is how you understood the topic you need to answer the specific question and make sure that you understand it clearly and you don't get sidetracked uh how well your ideas reasons and examples support your ideas so you need to extend your ideas you need to give examples and reasons so this is development so the next uh criteria is criterion sorry is organization so here the examiner will be looking at your paragraphing not only how many paragraphs you wrote but also how you organized your paragraph so how you organized your ideas into paragraphs and also cohesion and coherence so cohesion and coherence is how you connect your paragraphs together so the whole organization or your essay and also how you connect sentences together inside the essay so what linking devices do you use um this is this and finally also language use when i'm talking about language use i mean both grammar and vocabulary so use of your grammar and vocabulary to express your ideas sentence structure and also word choice because sometimes when i evaluate my students essays they don't understand sometimes why i correct some words so not only the um spelling of the word has to be correct but also how you choose the words because we have collocations and not always we can use some words to um express some certain meaning all right so let me check how our uh live stream is going yeah it seems that everything is fine from time to time i will just check your comments and what's going on all right so guys let's move on uh here i have a simple essay question and as i said before we're going to talk about problems but [Music] all right guys so here i am again sorry for this sometimes it happens all right so we are going to take a look at the as i said the essay based on the preference so the best which and all right guys so let's try it one more time and i hope that we will not see this again so let's move on to our essay question so some people prefer to take subways when they commute to work others like to take buses to get to their jobs which do you prefer use specific reasons and examples to support your choice so here let's take a look at the organization that i am going to share with you today and i hope that you will find it helpful so uh but first i'd like to ask you uh which do you prefer so do you prefer to take a subway or a bus even if you have a car or maybe you live in a city or in a town or maybe you are from a little village and you don't have the subway system just what do you think what would you choose to get to work by bus or to take the subway to work let me know in the comments [Music] [Music] so we have some answers i prefer taking subway to get to work it's relatively cheap fast and easy all right so of course when you are going to be writing an essay based on your preference first you need to think about your choice and this is what you do but we have here two different options yeah so we have um just a moment so we have uh the bus and the subway so for example i am choosing to commute to work by subway so this is my choice i take the subway to work and if you have the choice so you have one option what you need to do you need to write on about the advantages of your choice and you also can write on about the disadvantages of the choice that is not yours so for example in the first paragraph you can write down about the disadvantages of not your choice so in my case it's the disadvantages of riding on the bus and in the second paragraph you can put advantages to your choice in our case advantages to taking the subway so this is one way to organize your answer of course there are many different ways to do so and we're going to look at them in our further live streams and we took a look at some of them in our previous live streams so today this one so let's think about the disadvantages to not your choice in our case we are talking about the disadvantages of taking the bus so guys which disadvantages can you name type your answers in the chat box please so disadvantages to taking the bus [Music] so i have the answer here um i prefer to taking subway so make sure that it's i prefer to take you also can say i prefer taking or i prefer to take [Music] all right guys so i'm going to share with you some disadvantages of taking the bus and here we go traffic jams so if you take the bus you will have to be stuck in a traffic jam usually for example in big cities there are really huge traffic jams so number two stuffy if overcrowded and too hot in summer so if you live in a place uh where it where it's hot in summer in the bus it gets really hot and sweaty and because there are lots of people normally it's very uncomfortable so number three you may need to pass other passengers money onto the bus driver so in some cities in some countries it's really common uh when people who are saying at the back they are passing their money onto the driver and passengers who are sitting in front of them it becomes actually their responsibility so which is extremely uncomfortable and number four it's rather uncomfortable to be standing if no free seats so normally if there are no free seats available you will have to be riding uh while standing and you will swing from side to side because of this movement of the bus so here i listed some of the disadvantages let's take a look at yours so we have here it's not so fast depending on the quality of roads of course and it's always packed really yeah and sometimes more expensive than some way yeah especially if you have to take two or three buses and it's boiling in summer all right so guys the next uh step that we're going to make is we will think about the advantages to using the subway so then you think about the advantages to your choice think please about the advantages of writing on the subway please and feel free to type your answers in the chat box guys i'm really looking forward to seeing [Music] them so now i'm going to share with you the advantages to my choice which is the subway so no traffic congestion so traffic congestion is just a more advanced way to say traffic jams so when traffic is congested it means there are lots of cars on the road more comfortable if you have to ride standing yeah because there is a huge difference between standing on the bus and standing on the subway and it's more spacious and not too hot typically because it's underground and it's eco-friendly so if you are really worried about the environment and you are interested in environmental protection i think this is the case for you because really the subway system is much more eco-friendly than buses alright so let's check your comments so we have the subways more spacious than the bus yeah there are escalators you don't have to pass your money just buy a ticket or a token exactly thank you victoria this is a really great response all right so this is the first thing that you need to do so first you need to choose one option then you need to list you can do it on a sheet of paper because you will have a sheet of paper prepared for you a separate sheet of paper if you are going to take paper-based aisles if you are taking tofu i actually would recommend typing these advantages and disadvantages just on the screen like on the computer because then you can develop them so just you can type them straight away on the computer if you're going to write ielts uh computer-based aisles you can also do the same thing you just type with advantages disadvantages and then you can develop them all right so this is what you do think about advantages to your choice and disadvantages to not your choice okay so now let's take a look at the plan so the requirement is to have the following passages so or paragraphs the first one is introduction it's how you should begin then you need to write down minimum two body paragraphs so this is the minimum for a good assay in our essay today we decided to put disadvantages of not your choice in body paragraph number one and advantages to your choice in body paragraph number two so this is a very typical nice and easy to fulfill layout and finally we need to have a conclusion so four paragraphs all right guys so now let's take a look at how to write the introduction i always give one strategy for writing the introduction and this strategy is really simple and it's very well done so normally all right so the first one is you write a general statement on the topic second you write the prompt in your own words and answer the question and tell the reader what you are going to write about basically for all types of essay i will recommend to stick to one introduction because you will remember this thing you will remember this strategy and you can use it for any type of essay all right so let's take a look at how we can do this so again concentrate plus now and try to remember so general statement on the topic rewrite the prompt in your own words and answer the question and tell the reader what you're going to write about so guys let's take a look at the introduction but we have sentences that are disorganized so they are jumbled so take a moment and try to organize the introduction correctly so right in the chat box so what to put first and what goes next so is it bca or cba or maybe abc so go for it guys so there are some answers in the chat box let's check them together all right so here we go so the general statement on the topic is this one millions of people all over the world have to use public transportation to travel to work so this is something general uh very broad and this is not the paraphrased version of the prompt sentence but this is [Music] but this is how it works sorry i was sidetracked just a moment i lost my attention i'm really sorry all right so first you write the general statement on the topic millions of people all over the world have to use public transportation to travel to work so this is our very broad general statement the next one we have to rewrite the prompt in our own words and this is the sentence while some people think that it is more convenient to get the subway to work others would argue that it is much better to write on the subway so this is the paraphrase prompt and then finally you answer the question and you tell the reader what you're going to write about so i tried taking both the subway and the bus to get to my office and can definitely say that i prefer to ride on the subway because it has so many advantages over the city buses so this is your introduction and this is how you organize it so three sentences also because you are asked in this specific essay question about your preference so you can be free and you can write on about what you think so i prefer and so you can write on i and it's completely okay all right guys so moving on to our body paragraph number one so we agreed to write down about the disadvantages to not your choice in the first body paragraph and how to organize the body paragraph so first you have you need to have an opening statement so you need to show what you are going to be writing in this specific paragraph then you need to write explanations and examples and then if you have time or if you have ideas i would also recommend to close the paragraph so it's not the final conclusion but this is a little closing to your ideas in this specific paragraph so in terms of explanations and examples because you will be writing about the disadvantages to not your choice so actually there will be just some examples of disadvantages some explanations uh what you don't like in our case about the buses all right and again i have a task for you guys so here we have some sentences um so i'd like you to organize them correctly take two minutes please read it and try to put these letters in the correct order so you have two minutes guys [Music] hmm all right so let's take a look at the correct answer all right so here we go so opening statement let me begin by explaining why i consider that having a ride on the bus to work may be a miserable experience so this is how you open your paragraph and you show that you are going to be writing about your the disadvantages the next explanations and examples first of all the majority of people have to commute to work in rush hour since buses are always overcrowded and stuffy it's extremely hard to find a free seat it is inevitable that you will probably have to stand throughout the whole journey which is absolutely uncomfortable because you will be swung from side to side it is even more stressful in summer when it gets too hot and sweaty moreover it could become your responsibility to pass other passengers money on the subway on the bus onto the bus driver additionally you can find yourself stuck in traffic and be late for work therefore i always try to avoid traveling by this mode of transportation and would never recommend it to anybody uh we have explanations and examples and then we have our closing yeah so this is the final uh sentence therefore i always try to avoid traveling by this mode of transfer and would never recommend it to anybody so this is how you organize your body paragraph opening statement explanations and examples and then you close it okay so actually you do the same thing with your second body paragraph but here you you need to write on about the advantages of your choice in our case we're talking about subways so again you will need to have an opening statement to show that you prefer to take the subway and you are going to be writing about the pluses then you will need to have some examples and explanations of those advantages and then you will need to close it a little bit so guys for this let's recap our advantages so advantages to your choice no traffic congestion more comfortable if you have to ride standing more spacious and not too hot and eco-friendly and actually guys i have a i don't know if it's a small challenge or a big challenge it depends so i like you to write down not right now because it will take a long time and i i would like you to do it in the comments below the video so when you see the replay of this webinar you can go for it it's your homework so to say i want you to follow this procedure i write an opening statement give explanations and examples and close this paragraph so write down body paragraph number two to our essay so write down about the advantages of writing on the subway so everything is already done for you you just need to list all these advantages and to make sentences okay so it's your homework and just type it in the comments below the video all right after this webinar of course and i will give you some more tips so here we have some phrases how you can present advantages disadvantages or some of your ideas so because you need to show the examiner exactly what is this that you are writing so you can write something as to begin with first firstly first of all secondly one more upside which cannot be denied is another minus two is on top of that moreover so some phrases to give an example for example for instance to illustrate so some words to draw a conclusion thus so consequently therefore and some words how you can write advantages or disadvantages in a different way so advantages benefit upside positive aspect plus disadvantage drawback downside negative aspect minus so make sure that you vary your language and avoid repetition in your essay for this try to use different uh phrases all right and guys we're also going to look at the conclusion so again a reminder our topic for the essay is some people prefer to take subways when they commute to work others like to take buses to get to their jobs which do you prefer so now our conclusion what to do here so you need to paraphrase the prompt sentence i know that we paraphrased this prompt sentence in our introduction as well so do it summarized you need to summarize your reasons why you chose sorry again sometimes it happens with the camera i'm here again i'm really sorry i don't know what's happening today okay so i hope that you could hear me and we summarize the reasons for our choice and what we do for this uh probably i'll say it one more time because i'm not sure if you heard it or no so in our conclusion first we paraphrase the prompt sentence again as we did in the introduction don't forget to include such words as in conclusion or to summarize then you need to summarize the reasons for your choice so you need to state again why you chose one or the other option let's take a look at the conclusion so in conclusion although some people opt for getting to work by bus i would much rather take the subway because i am sure this extremely reasonable way of mass transportation provides more options and means traveling to work faster and in a cleaner and more comfortable environment so as you see i paraphrased the prompt sentence again some people opt for getting to work by bus then i said what i prefer and i summarized the reason so i just basically summarize the advantages of using this subway so guys we are going to wrap up today's webinar and i hope that you found it helpful all right so guys thank you very much for being with me today once again your homework right on the body paragraph number two a reminder it's where you need to write on about the disadv about the advantages i'm sorry to writing on the subway and you can type this answer in the comments below the video it's absolutely fine all right guys if you have any questions maybe you want to ask me something about the asset writing i mean you can also type your questions in the comments below the video and i'll try to find time and i will try to answer your questions a reminder if you haven't subscribed to our youtube channel yet make sure to do so and hit the bell icon if you'd like to get notified of all our upcoming webinars and lessons you also can study at our school we have aisles in toefl preparation and general and business english so you can check out our website los angeles english school dot com and find all information you need also we have essay correction service so if you'd like you can use it you also can visit our website and check the information on that so you will get the evaluation of your essay or writing desk number one to toefl or aisles with the evaluation corrections and recommendations all right guys thank you again very much it was my pleasure to be working with you today and i wish you have a fantastic day or evening or whatever you are having right now and i hope to see you in my next

Channel: Los Angeles English School

Views: 1,206

Keywords: IELTS, IELTS preparation, IELTS preparation online, IELTS on skype, IELTS Writing, IELTS essay, Essay, IELTS writing task 2, How to write an essay, english lesson, learn english, TOEFL, TOEFL writing, TOEFL independent essay, TOEFL webinar, IELTS webinar, opinion essay, Advantages vs Disadvantages Essay

Id: exEjCqC0YsI

Length: 41min 20sec (2480 seconds)

Published: Thu Aug 20 2020