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Hey guys, it's Shaelin and I'm here today with  another writing video. So today we're going to   be talking about description, a favorite topic of  mine. I love description, descriptive writing is   one of my favorite things to do in prose, so I  feel like this video has been a long time coming.   I've been excited to make it for a while. Now part  of the reason this video has taken a hot second to   pull together is because I didn't really know  how to approach it. When I think of description   I don't really think of it through a list of  tips or rules, it's more like a skill-set that   you can apply in infinite situations, so it's very  hard to boil down to like a boom boom boom list   of points, in my opinion. I mean I could do that,  but I think you'd get fairly generic advice, like   use all of the senses and stuff like that. So  this video isn't going to be necessarily a list of   tips or points but instead I'm going to go through  what I think the tenets and qualities of good   description are. If you are looking for some more  specific tips on how to use language I will leave   my video on word choice in the description. I  scripted these two videos to be a set together,   to be kind of used in tandem, so that one has more  specific tips for word choice. Here we're going to   talk more about bringing it together into actual  description. You know description is kind of like   the paint of your story. It's what allows your  reader to engage with the story in a sensory way,   whether that's visual or really any of the  other senses. It can be very broad but also   very specific because they are basically infinite  things you can do with description right, because   they are infinite things that you can describe.  Now I wanted to start by distinguishing purple   prose versus more fanciful language because  I think there are misconceptions about this,   and purple prose is a very valid concern and  something that you should be working to avoid   in your work, but I've also seen good writing  qualified as purple prose because I think   the definition of it has become a little unclear.  Purple prose is something you might be familiar   with, it is overly embellished language and so  a lot of the time what I see happen is people   take any writing style that's figurative or  fancy in some way, and say that's purple prose,   and that bothers me because I feel like there's  this weird thing happening where people will say   that like more fanciful prosy language, will say  that that's the most upheld style of writing,   but I actually don't think that's true. I actually  see that style of writing condemned a lot. I think   the style of writing that's the most upheld is  kind of minimalist realism, you know like the   Hemingway style. There's something to be said  about the fact that at some point a few white men   started writing in a specific style and everyone  was like 'that's the good way to write.' Pared   back, straightforward, smooth. I'm not saying  that that's a bad style to write in, actually   that's a great style to write in. You know,  minimalist realism can be beautiful, it can be   really effective, and it's a hard style to write  in. I'm not saying it's easy and I'm not saying   it's bad. But it's not the only way to write.  There's nothing wrong with more embellished prose   if that's your style. I love more prosy writing,  that's my thing. That's what I find fun and joyful   in working on a piece, it's what's natural for  me. I'm not trying to show off. I do want to   distinguish the difference. Something is purple  prose when it becomes convoluted, when it's   lacking clarity, when it's cliche, and when it's  melodramatic. On the other hand you can have very   fanciful good description with complex language  but it's still clear, it's not overly convoluted,   and it's fresh and interesting, and it's not  melodramatic. There are differences between   these two things. I definitely don't want anyone  to feel in this video that by telling you how   to write descriptively I'm telling you how to  write in a certain style, because this applies   to whatever your writing style is. If you have a  very clean sparse writing style that's amazing,   there's nothing wrong with any range of writing  styles. You do want to be on the lookout of   purple prose though, which is where the writing  becomes convoluted for the sake of complexity.   With purple prose, typically what happens is the  writer is prioritizing the complexity of the prose   rather than the actual effectiveness of the  imagery and the writing. So let's start with   the first tenet of good description and it's  that good description is clear. If I had any   advice to a new writer I would say focus on and  prioritize the clarity of your prose, and this   doesn't mean your prose can't be fanciful,  this doesn't mean you can't use a simile,   this doesn't mean you can't write more complexly.  I ran into a lot of problems when I was not   prioritizing the clarity of my prose, because  prose can be any number of things but if it's   not clear it's not going to be effective because  if it's not clear the reader won't be able to   picture what they're supposed to picture or take  away what they're supposed to take away. No amount   of complex sentence structure and obscure synonyms  will compensate for a sentence that is not clear.   It's very easy to convolute the writing by overly  convoluting terms. Writers can sometimes avoid   just using a noun because they're afraid  of telling, and I remember doing this too.   I will give you an example for my own writing and  yes, slightly cringey. I wrote a story once when   I had first started writing short stories. The  characters were walking through the snow and so   they had snow shoes on. Rather than just referring  to them as snow shoes I felt the need to embellish   that a little more and the main character  referred to a snowshoe as 'a biting board.'   Why. So overly convoluting terms and just  avoiding being straightforward for the sake of it   can really impact the clarity, and another thing  is just overly convoluting the sentence structure.   Beautiful prose is not going to be built on the  backbone of eight semicolons in a sentence. If you   want to again, cool, but that sentence will only  be as effective as it is clear. I struggled with   clarity a lot in my writing. It is probably still  to this day the thing I struggle with the most.   Even when I think I'm being really clear oh boy I  am not being. I had a professor in university who   was really cracking down on my clarity issues and  he knew that I had clarity issues and so he was   ready to call me out on my clarity issues. So the  third time I was ever submitting a piece to this   professor, I was like okay I've had major clarity  issues both times I've submitted a story to this   prof, I need to do better with my clarity.  And so I did what I called a clarity read.   It was a draft where I only focused on clarity.  I went through and any sentence where I was like,   I'm not sure this makes sense, I either got rid of  the sentence or I clarified it. Yes sometimes that   meant making it a bit simpler but that also meant  making it digestible. So I would say focus on the   clarity of your prose before really anything else.  Nothing else can compensate for a lack of clarity   is I guess what I'm saying. It doesn't matter how  beautiful the image is, if it's not clear it's not   going to be effective in its beauty. The second  core quality of good description is specificity.   If you clicked on this video you knew that  I was going to talk about specificity.   I am sorry it's the good shit. I have an entire  video on specific detail and word choice so I will   leave that in the description if you want to check  that out and you want some more detail on that. It   was a light bulb moment for me when I realized,  wait a second, I can write powerful description   not by overly complicating my prose, you know  let's say biting board instead of snowshoe,   but instead if I just pick more specific things  to describe the image and the language used to   describe the image will be inherently interesting.  Rather than saying that there was a song playing   on the radio I could specify what the song is.  That in itself will be a more interesting turn   of phrase. Song is very vague there are a lot  of songs in this world. Specifying what the song   is immediately adds more interest to the  sentence because that is a more interesting   set of words, assuming you choose an interesting  set of words. So it was probably the biggest   step up for my description when I realized that  the key to it was just to be more specific,   what you're describing will be inherently  interesting. Describing specific things is more   interesting than describing vague things. Vague  things are hard to picture and they're usually   quite expected. Describing specific things or a  more specific version of a vague thing, right song   to specific song, immediately adds more interest  to a sentence because the details themselves are   interesting. So it kind of helps take the weight  off this need to overly convolute things that can   really impede the clarity because what you're  describing in itself will be interesting. So   we welcome funky things with language, but you'll  have that base if what you're describing is more   specific and you're using more specific word  choice.So I'm going to read a little excerpt to   you, this is from The Beguiling by Zsuzsi Gartner  who I think is one of the most amazing specificity   queens on this earth. So I kind of just started  flipping through the beginning to be honest, just   looking for a good chunk of description, and it's  everywhere. This entire book is just viciously   specific. So let's look at some examples of  specificity. "When I did show up at a wedding   a few years later, I finally figured out why a  nice guy like Zoltan was so alarmingly single:   he was too nice. He'd turned the friend guy.  The guy you went for coffee with at 2 30 a.m   after the accordion player in the Klemzer punk  band dumped you, the guy who assured you that   you didn't look stupid in the faux fur jacket you  spent too much on at the Aritzia warehouse sale,   the guy you could go to a movie with who wouldn't  think it meant anything other than going to see   a movie. All women needed a Zoltan. Ff he'd  lived in Toronto he would have been my Zoltan."   Very specific right, in this case the language  is interesting because of the specificity. Now   I did get a lot of questions or comments on my  video on specificity, concerns from people saying   that adding specific details is just adding  redundancies and if you're making your writing   more specific then you're just adding redundant  details and so it would be better to be vague.   To that I say, then don't pick redundant details.  Pick details that add something to the story.   I know that people had a lot of concerns about  that in the examples from my specificity video   and I get that and it's very hard in an example to  judge whether or not a detail is adding something   because it's just a standalone example, there's  no context, there's no larger context to place   it within. But in your own writing you'll know  whether something adds or not. Like I find when   I'm editing my work especially I cut a lot of  details because I get there and I just go, this   doesn't add anything, and so it can go. There's no  specific way to know whether it adds something or   doesn't. I don't go through a list of questions  or qualities, you'll just know this detail adds   something, this one doesn't, this one reveals  something this one doesn't. Good description is   also surprising and insightful. I think really  good description goes a layer deeper than just   telling us what things look like and it has an  element of insight or truthfulness to it. So I'm   gonna read just one sentence as an example that  I want to unpack because I think it's a beautiful   example of that. This is from a short story called  Baba by K-Ming Chang. It's a really good short   story so I will leave it in the description, the  writing throughout is really amazing. K-Ming Chang   is a really incredible descriptive writer but I  just want to highlight this one sentence and it's   from the first paragraph. "It's August when my  father leaves. He says he'll take a job at a slot   machine factory outside of Chengdu, a city that  sizzles out in my mouth like a match." So already   we have specificity here saying that he's going  to take a job at a slot machine factory, that's   this very specific detail, but what I really want  to highlight is that line 'a city that sizzles out   in my mouth like a match.' I have never been to  Chengdu, I know it's a city in China and that's   pretty much all I know about it. I don't know  anything about it, I can't picture it in my head,   I don't know where in china it's located. I  know nothing about the city. From that one line,   a city that sizzles out in my mouth like a  match, I have a perfect sense for the energy of   the setting. For the context of this story I don't  really need to know more. I don't necessarily need   to know what the buildings look like or what the  weather is like, that one sentence kind of does   enough. It's a very surprising but insightful  detail to say that the city sizzles out in your   mouth like a match. It's very visceral. It engages  the narrator's body, it engages the senses,   it's such a punchy surprising insightful piece  of description that kind of tells me everything   I need to know about the setting without actually  even describing it. Now K-Ming Chang could have   equally taken the more obvious approach and  said 'he'll take a job at a slot machine factory   outside of Chengdu, a city that has buildings like  this and weather like this' and describe it in the   more concrete way and concreteness is good, but  what she's done here is she's taken the abstract   qualities of the city and she's presented them to  you in a concrete way. She's taken the abstract   feeling of the place and she's synthesized it  into a physical experience and it's amazing.   It's a great use of sensory writing and insightful  truthful interesting writing. Now one thing people   ask a lot about description is how do I integrate  into the story, like how do I get it to flow. This   is a question I've seen a lot, how do I get my  description to flow. And it's a tricky question to   answer because I mean there are a lot of ways to  get description to flow, and it's a very intuitive   thing really based on your better judgment.  Typically with description you won't just   get like a solid block of only description with  nothing else around it and I think the best way   to think of integrating your description into the  story is to make it active and in character. The   best descriptions will reveal us something about  the character, using your character's actions,   their perceptions and their emotional biases.  Their emotional reactions will be one of the best   ways to integrate the description into the story  so it does more than just tell us what things   look like. I think it is a missed opportunity to  see description as something very utilitarian,   something that's just there to tell us what  things look like so we can get on with the story.   Description is an integral part of the story and  it can tell us so much more about a character,   about a situation, about a story, beyond just  what things look like. How your character   sees and describes the world can reveal a lot  about them. Now I do want to address one piece   of advice that I see a lot thatIi think is really  bad advice. Now again, is any writing advice bad?   I don't know, this is writing advice that does not  resonate with me. So I'll see it said a lot that   characters won't notice things that wouldn't be  important to them, so for example if you walk   into a room and it's full of sports memorabilia  but you don't know anything about sports and you   don't care about sports you won't notice it,  you won't describe it. Do y'all not see things   that aren't directly relevant to your interests?  If I walk into a room full of sports memorabilia   it's not like the walls will be blank to me  because I don't care about sports, I just won't   have the language to describe it as specifically.  I'm not gonna know who the players whose penants   are hanging on the wall are I'm not gonna have any  emotional attachment to it, I'm gonna know that   I'm in a room with someone that I probably don't  have much in common with. We have very different   interests. But it's not that I'm not gonna see  it and it's not that I'm not gonna describe it.   That doesn't mean that if your character who  doesn't know anything about sports walks into   this room they shouldn't describe all of the  sports memorabilia, they can still describe it,   it's just gonna be with a very different tone than  if the person who walks in is like an avid sports   enthusiast. The tone's gonna be very different,  the language is gonna be pretty different. Using   a character's actions is a great way to integrate  description into the narrative using the physical   cues your character provides you with or another  character provides you with can be a great segue   for description. If you have to describe a tree,  just describing the tree on its own maybe works   in some cases, but knowing how the description  of that tree fits into the movement of the scene   can be a lot more effective. Knowing where the  character is standing in relation to the tree,   if they're doing anything in relation to the tree,  like if your character is about to start climbing   the tree, that's going to give you action to leap  frog off of. It's going to give you a very natural   point to build description off from. I just wanted  to give you a little bit of an example of some   description integrated with action, so you don't  really feel like you're reading description but   you're getting a lot of descriptive language. So  this is from History of Wolves by Emily Fridlund,   one of my favorite novels, I've talked extensively  about this novel and how much I love it,   and the writing in it is really beautiful but  accessible. I think it's just a master class in   language and atmospheric tension. As you'll  see there's action happening and we're getting   description based on the beats of the scene. "Mr  Grierson treated history odyssey like we both knew   it was a chore. Secretly I wanted to win. I was  determined to see a wolf. Nights I went out in   mukluks, a ski mask and my father's down jacket,  which was redolent with his scents, with tobacco   and mildew and bitter coffee. It was like wearing  his body while he slept, like earning a right to   his presence and silence and bulk. I sat on an old  ice bucket near the furthest fish house and sipped   boiled water from the thermos, but it was rare  for a wolf to be spotted here so late in winter.   All I ever saw were distant logs squirming with  crows. In the end i had to settle for a dead one.   Saturdays I snowshoed to the forest service  nature center, where i studied the soft bitch   in the lobby, with her glass eyes and coral nails,  her sunken black cheeks pulled back in what looked   like a smile. Peg, the naturalist there, pouted  when she saw me try to touch the wolf's tail.   'Uh uh,' she scolded. She gave me gummy bears  and taxidermy techniques, told me how to sculpt   eyelids from clay and muscles from polyurethane  foam. "Iron the skin, iron the skin," she warned   me." There's a lot of really impeccable writing  here going on. So here we have things that the   character is doing right, she's going out to see  a wolf. She actually has a goal so there's that   drive, it's not just senseless wandering. We  get that description of what she's wearing and   we get that wisdom about her father's jacket.  We don't just say she's wearing a down jacket,   what it looks like, we don't just get told what it  smells like, but we get that wisdom. "it was like   wearing his body while he slept, like earning  a right to his presence and silence and bulk,"   which is a revealing detail about the character  and it's a great example of using description as   a way to reveal character psychology, you know  we're learning about her based on a description   of a jacket. Rather than just being told that  there are distant logs squirming with crows,   which is an interesting image, it's active it's  through the context of a scene. It's through the   context of her having a goal. She's looking for a  wolf. So all in all I think that this is a really   strong paragraph, it's not pure description but  it's description paired with interesting narrative   and with motion, with scene, with movement, with  character. The description isn't just there to   tell us what things look like, what things smell  like, it's there to actually move the story. The   description here is part of the narrative movement  so you don't feel like you're reading description,   because the description is doing more than  just describing, which good description does.   It doesn't just describe what things look like,  it's part of the movement of the narrative and   part of the depth of the narrative. Another really  important quality of good description is that it   is well edited and economical. This almost relates  more to writing style in general. I think it's not   a bold statement to say that if your description  isn't well line edited it probably won't be   that effective. Learning to line edit effectively  is what will help your style shine through. One   thing that a lot of people will say when you talk  about line editing and you'll talk about all the   things you can cut from your work, like okay you  can cut all these weasel words, you can cut these   filters, these are weak verbs etc etc. You talk  about all the weak constructions you can cut,   one thing a lot of people will say in response to  that is, well you're just editing out your style.   But you're actually doing the opposite. Your  style is not built on weak words, your style   is not built on the word just, your style is not  built on the word very, your style is going to be   built on the strong aspects of your work. So when  you cut the weak aspects, your style can actually   shine through. I remember a professor talking  about this in my first ever fiction workshop and   we were a couple months into the fiction workshop  and she was like "it's really exciting because   I'm starting to see all of your styles shine  through. You know at the start of the semester   you kind of all had the same style because you  were all making the same mistakes, you all had   all this mess to your writing and so what it was  doing is it was just burying your style. Now that   you've got rid of the mess your style can actually  shine through, and now you all have a very unique   distinct voice." So learning to line edit is going  to do so much for your descriptions. I will leave   some of my line editing videos in the description.  And finally good description is enjoyable to read.   I think it's a mistake to see description as  like a utilitarian thing just there to serve its   purpose of telling us what things look like and  then moving on with its life. Description can be   part of the joy of a piece, it can be in itself  something that's beautiful and interesting to   read. Reframing description as something that on  its own can be interesting can be beautiful, can   be effective, can be fun to read will really help  in taking your descriptions to the next level.   Finding joy in the descriptive writing itself  rather than just seeing descriptive writing   as something that needs to go there to serve a  purpose but is not the most interesting aspect   of the story. It doesn't inherently have to be  boring or slow, it can inherently be interesting   and engaging. Especially when you start using  your description to do more work in the story   and to reveal more about the character, using  it as a way to explore subtle emotional states,   can help you really take your description to  the next level because the description will be   doing so much more in your work. I think in good  description the reader can take something away   beyond just the visual sense, whether they pick up  on that consciously or not, you know it's feeding   into other aspects of the story and even just on  a linguistic level like the language itself can   be part of the joy of reading a piece. That's all  for this video! Thank you so much for watching, if   you have any questions you can always send me an  ask on tumblr and I'll see you in another video. Bye
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Published: Fri May 28 2021
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